WetCanvas
Home Member Services Content Areas Tools Info Center WC Partners Shop Help
Channels:
Search for:
in:

Welcome to the WetCanvas forums. You are currently viewing our boards as a guest which gives you limited access to view most discussions, articles and access our other FREE features. By joining our free community you will have access to post topics, communicate privately with other members (PM), respond to polls, upload your own photos and access many other special features. Registration is fast, simple and absolutely free so please, join our community today!

If you have any problems with the registration process or your account login, please visit our help center.

Go Back   WetCanvas > The WetCanvas! Galleria > Structured Critiques
User Name
Password
Register Mark Forums Read

Salute to our Partners
WC! Sponsors

Our Sponsors
Reply  
 
Thread Tools Search this Thread Display Modes
  #1   Report Bad Post  
Old 07-19-2011, 01:02 PM
barry73 barry73 is offline
Member
fife,scotland
 
Join Date: Aug 2010
Posts: 66
 
Hails from Scotland
Theendforladywhyte?-structured critique

MY IMAGE(S):



GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Theendforladywhyte?-structured critique
Year Created:
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 50inchesx40inches
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I've posted this previously but now I think it's finished.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Anything and everything is helpful
Reply With Quote
  #2   Report Bad Post  
Old 07-19-2011, 01:16 PM
La_'s Avatar
La_ La_ is online now
A Local Legend
Alberta, where coyotes look both ways before crossing the highway
 
Join Date: Jun 2006
Posts: 9,816
 
Hails from Canada
Re: Theendforladywhyte?-structured critique

is the blur factor true to real life or do we need a better picture

is the crooked red wall behind her true to real life or do we need a better picture

la
__________________
_____________________________________________
Pacis, der Frieden, Mir, Shanti, Friour, Paz, Pace, Kapayapaan, Fred, Piersica, Taika, Aman, Beke, Miers, Shalom, Salam السلام, Heping, Mir (Мир),Paix,Ειρήνη
Peace - When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know Peace
Latin, German, Serbian, Bengali, Icelandic, Brazilian, Italian, Filipino, Swedish, Romanian, Lithuanian, Hindi/Urdu, Hungarian, Latvian, Hebrew, Arabic, Chinese, Russian, French,Greek
Reply With Quote
  #3   Report Bad Post  
Old 07-19-2011, 07:15 PM
Use Her Name's Avatar
Use Her Name Use Her Name is offline
Lord of the Arts
New Mexico
 
Join Date: Feb 2006
Posts: 2,228
 
Hails from United States
Re: Theendforladywhyte?-structured critique

the wow factor is obvious here. The blur? It would be better if it were tighter (less blurred). I agree that a little more focus on the camera might make a difference. Maybe you might re-post the picture.
__________________
See more of my work at My Blog
Reply With Quote
  #4   Report Bad Post  
Old 08-02-2011, 08:37 AM
barry73 barry73 is offline
Member
fife,scotland
 
Join Date: Aug 2010
Posts: 66
 
Hails from Scotland
Re: Theendforladywhyte?-structured critique


this is the best photo I could get!
Reply With Quote
  #5   Report Bad Post  
Old 08-04-2011, 11:00 PM
Don Berendsen's Avatar
Don Berendsen Don Berendsen is offline
Enthusiast
Loch Stahkenberyl, NSW
 
Join Date: Aug 2003
Posts: 1,466
 
Hails from Australia
Re: Theendforladywhyte?-structured critique

To me the facial expression is nicely painted but unfortunately the pearls and to a lesser extant the flower really draw the eye away from her. The high contrast, sharp edges and modeling of the pearls are all attention getters, cover them up and it's a very different picture.
__________________
One downside to retirement is I no longer get the weekends off.
Reply With Quote
  #6   Report Bad Post  
Old 08-09-2011, 12:17 AM
Keith Russell's Avatar
Keith Russell Keith Russell is online now
A WC! Legend
Lenexa, Kansas, USA
 
Join Date: Aug 2000
Posts: 32,671
 
Hails from United States
Re: Theendforladywhyte?-structured critique

I had to look at this for a while, to "read" the chair back as a chair back, and not her other (very out-of-place) knee. (I still think her waist might be too short...)

The pearls are the most highly-rendered objects in the painting, yet her face should (IMO) be the focus of attention. Her hand is barely suggested (or poorly drawn), yet it sits right next to a (rather well) rendered bracelet (and those pearls!)

So, you need (IMO, again) to take the rendering up to a better "finish", and figure out a different way to direct the focus where you want it, or back off on the rendering in those areas that are not meant to be the centre of attention...
Reply With Quote
  #7   Report Bad Post  
Old 08-24-2011, 08:02 PM
LynnDigby's Avatar
LynnDigby LynnDigby is offline
Lord of the Arts
Ohio
 
Join Date: Nov 2005
Posts: 2,965
 
Hails from United States
Re: Theendforladywhyte?-structured critique

You know, I really like the way you painted her face. And I totally agree with the comments about the flower and pearls. Cover them with your hand and see how she pops out and comes alive. The light colored cloth is a distraction as well. I'd keep it all good and dark and let the glow come from the face.
__________________
Lynn
L Y N N - D I G B Y
Reply With Quote
  #8   Report Bad Post  
Old 12-12-2011, 05:38 AM
Evelien1's Avatar
Evelien1 Evelien1 is offline
Senior Member
Amsterdam, europe
 
Join Date: Jun 2010
Posts: 287
 
Hails from Netherlands
Re: Theendforladywhyte?-structured critique

maybe the eyes need more sharpness. Just accents of thin, contrasting strokes, to add some sharpness to it.
If that would succeed, the pearls could be a balancing factor to the face. The pearls more overt, the face more sharp and conscious.
I like the way the face is kind of hidden already.
What is the title about?
__________________
Evelien from Amsterdam
Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools Search this Thread
Search this Thread:

Advanced Search
Display Modes


Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 10:03 PM.


Copyright 1998-2013, F+W Media, Inc. All Rights Reserved.