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Old 01-05-2003, 09:42 AM
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Divi Divi Tree, Aruba

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Title: Divi Divi Tree, Aruba
Year Created: 2003
Medium: Watercolor
Surface: Watercolor Paper
Dimension: 11
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
My objective was to try to capture a Caribbean scene of a tree, designed to cope with the Trade winds, set against the blues of sea and sky and a crashing wave.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
I would be grateful for any constructive comments on how I might improve the painting, particularly the foreground and wave.
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Old 01-06-2003, 08:37 PM
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I think you have done a good job at capturing a caribeean feel with the clear blue tropical water nd strong sunlight. I have some trouble detecting where the sun is by looking at the shadows I think establishing that would help a bit.

The thing that bothers me a bit is the division between land a water. The edge is hard and dark and attracts the eye. The bent shape on the left end of the land mass looks a bit odd and also attracts the eye. I would try to break this part up with looser brushwork. I have tried to show the effect in the edited version. I also thing that the diagonal shape works better compositionally.
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Old 01-07-2003, 09:40 AM
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Thanks for your constructive comments. I appreciate the point made about the hard and sharp edge of the rocks and they are certainly, on reflection, too angular. What obviously, does not come over in the painting, is that the rocks drop to the water and although the waves are crashing up they were not covering the edge. This is where my inexperience is exposed as I have tried to paint too literally.

With reference to your comment on the diagonal shape working better compositionally, could you clarify that point, please.

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Bill Birchall
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Old 01-07-2003, 02:41 PM
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I guess "works better compositionally" is my way of saying that I like it better LOL. I will come back with a longer reply, I have to give some thought to why I think that way...
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