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Old 04-29-2009, 12:28 PM
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Title: Accordian Girl
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Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 18
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I just finished this painting that is from a photo I found in the Reference Library. There is going to be a Spring Art Show this weekend and this painting will be amongst a number of my oil paintings. I did some touch ups this mo<br>ing and used Japan Dryer with the paint, so hope the touchups will dry fast so I can va<br>ish the painting on Friday mo<br>ing.

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I cropped the original photo and made changes to the color before printing out a photo to paint from. The original photo shows an audience of people reflected in the store window, but because of the cropping I felt trying to add figures to the painting would throw the balance off. The audience would be too close to the right of the painting. It does seem odd, however that the Accordian Girl's only audience is two women with their backs to her. What reaction do you have?
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Old 04-29-2009, 01:07 PM
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Re: Accordian Girl

I love it! It is great and it reminds me of so many street muscians who are ignored by the general populace. Only crit I would have is the elbow against the red background. Perhaps the background needs toning, a little would help push the background red back. You did a great job.

I can see putting it in a frame for the show, but it should not be varnished for a minimum of several weeks for very thin paint and months for thicker paint. If it is varnished too soon it will crack.

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Old 04-29-2009, 01:30 PM
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Re: Accordian Girl

Beautifully painted. Perfect, in fact. I also think you get a great narrative by having her playing and only two women turning their backs. The life of the artist...sigh.

I do suggest a different approach to the painting following two dicta: The artist's job is to simplify the scene and if an element doesn't contribute positively to the composition, it should be dropped.

So, no painting of the grate in front of her legs, no painting of each brick in the background, no painting of the light rectangle at the bottom, no painting of the balcony with wires at the upper left and the thingy jutting out at an angle. And, hey, if you like my suggestions, think of the time you'll save!
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Old 04-29-2009, 01:54 PM
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Re: Accordian Girl

It is very nicely painted,I like the coposition.
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Re: Accordian Girl

gee....I hate to disagree with my hero....but I think the architectural elements really make the composition.....
the vertical and horizontal hard lines.....and the long vertical line behind her ......
then the slight diagonal of the accordion keys.....and then punctuated by the red circle on her cheek.....
I think it's interesting......even the handrail coming out of her hat....makes me think of a music note...hahaha...
and starts the curled sweep my eye takes down & along the accordion thingy(?).....and her curved posture....
that contradicts the squareness of the other elements....
anyway......I like it...alot....I also agree that the inattentive audience is a plus to the story......
singing on the street is probably very similar to painting in a deli...hahahah.....yd

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Old 04-29-2009, 03:00 PM
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Re: Accordian Girl

Love it!! Dont change a thing!
Let us know how the show is.
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Re: Accordian Girl

Photography 101 is to never have background elements growing out of heads, so I would do something about the railing that does that here. Also, if the figure was brighter against a slightly duller background, it would help with the very busy design (although you have reduced the compositional elements somewhat from the reference). Providing an alt. Neat piece!

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Re: Accordian Girl

ok....he's right....it does look better without the music note doesn't it....
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Re: Accordian Girl

I do agree that the composition could be helped by eliminating the railing, but I'm not sure that it would be completely necessary. I love the technique on this, and the personality really shines through.

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Re: Accordian Girl

I think you did a great job on this, and love the way the skirt drapes!
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Re: Accordian Girl

Yep, Allan was right, but this is a super painting. Very happy appealing painting.........Lenore
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Re: Accordian Girl

It's interesting to me that so many folks advocate the retention of the "non essential" elements. It's why I spend time on the forum- to learn different views which either replace or enhance my own. But it's hard to judge a different approach if you can't see it so I did a photoshop, building on Alan's, which simplifies the scene. I still like it better so, but there's one element which you chose not to paint which does, I think, aid the narrative and that's the hat she's put out to earn some money. So I added it to the photoshop.

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Re: Accordian Girl

Excellent composition! Well painted and drawn. I like way you made use of the straight lines.
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Re: Accordian Girl

I really love this painting, it is just the sort of subject i liek to paint as well. It's interesting to see how the fence changes the painting! With it there you are obviously on the outside then with it photoshopped out you seem closer and part of her "crowd" I don't know.... Perhaps I like it better with the fence even busy as it is. Looking across the fence and not part of her ignoring crowd..
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Re: Accordian Girl

What I like about this piece is the way the space is broken up into Modigliani - like rectangles. While the handrail coming out of her hat gave me a pause, the rest of the stairwell elements give the girl a marionette look that is re-enforced by the rouge and little hat. There's also a vibe of girl performing on a pole. To me the fence is a strong visual to the narrative that she is the performer, apart from the crowd.
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