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Old 12-24-2007, 02:03 AM
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Temperature Inversion

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Title: Temperature Inversion
Year Created: 2007
Medium: Oil
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Dimension: 12x16
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This is a scene at Whistler-Blackcomb that I enjoyed. The whole time I was there all the colors were really muted because of the constant fog, and I wanted to throw some color in there.

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Old 12-24-2007, 04:13 PM
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Re: Temperature Inversion

Nice job. The colors seem so foreign and strange, but excellent detail. I think it's good as is.
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Old 12-24-2007, 08:02 PM
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Re: Temperature Inversion

very nice texture and unusual color. I would like to see heftier trees, more lifelike. These are more like symbols...
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Re: Temperature Inversion

I love the look and feel you captured in the mountains;excellent. The foreground looks a little washed out to me and I agree about the trees. Probably could use a little more form and variation.
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Old 12-25-2007, 01:53 AM
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Re: Temperature Inversion

oh and i do like the tall tall trees

nicely different arrangement of colors, warm on top, cold on the bottom, balance by the both of the trees, very cool

not sure about the little bitty structure about dead center ... shack? snow cat? rock? ... does it need to be there? i wouldn't miss it

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Re: Temperature Inversion

Thanks for the comments guys! Adding form to the trees would be quite beneficial. One thing that surprised about the trees in real life was that they were very tall and slender, but nearly geometrically perfect. The dark thing in the center is actually a clump of trees in the distance, but I can see how they really only take away from the composition. Thanks a lot for the comments guys, I really appreciate them!
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Old 12-25-2007, 07:51 AM
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Re: Temperature Inversion

This is so beautiful. Great colors and brush work. The only crit is the distant clump of trees in the center. I don't read them as distance. They seem to be on the same plane as the trees to the left, making them look like a clump of bushes. If you can't push them back, I'd eliminate them, imo.

Regardless, it's a very very nice piece.
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Old 12-25-2007, 01:42 PM
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Re: Temperature Inversion

Hi freeskier. Going into the Sierras I know in higher elevations trees are at times stunted or damaged from the storms that come thru I enjoy the painting a great deal but would like to know if you know what kinda trees they are?...well done....John
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Re: Temperature Inversion

Nicely painted.
It evokes a feeling of crisp mountain air.
The composition would benefit from a more clearly defined vertical focal point. As it is, we tend to slide down that slope on the upper right, past those trees, and out of the painting.
Something vertical on the right would stop that
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Re: Temperature Inversion

I enjoy the way you've depicted the higher elevation pine/spruce. When they're sheltered from the wind they do tend to grow symmetrically. I like the tightly controlled palette on this.
Only critiques are:
I'd like to see the color in the trees brought back down a notch - less deep green or whatever it is (can't tell on my monitor) and pick up a bit of the iciness of the surroundings as highlights on the needles.
Also, I kind of get the feeling that the foreground is just killing space, like the painting actually starts about 1/4 of the way up the canvas....sorry, just looks like filler at the bottom.

I remember the temperature inversions at Stowe, Sun Valley, and up in the Sierras, so this painting's accuracy is really palpable. Funny how that warmth comes through in a scene so initially cold. Good job!
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Re: Temperature Inversion

This painting has impact.

I always imagine mountains to be ice blue and this is a pleasant surprise.

The mountain look so majestic, the trees are great, I love how you painted them to really show off the enormity of the mountain range.

The foreground bothers me. It kinda cuts the painting as it is so different in palette. If you pulled some of the sky colour down into the foreground maybe.

I just scrolled down and cut the bottom 1/4 of the painting out. Looks terrific, but then reduces the impact of the ,mountain range for me..

Going to read what the others have said..


That little clump of trees didn't bother me at all. If you want them pushed back a little just make them bluer..

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Re: Temperature Inversion

This is beautiful, I love the colors and all the detail in the rocks and the snow.

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Re: Temperature Inversion

It's very Bob Ross. Where's your imagination and personality in the painting.
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Re: Temperature Inversion

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It's very Bob Ross. Where's your imagination and personality in the painting.
This is ABSOLUTELY the worst critique I have EVER read. I am totally fine with people saying that they dislike my work, but the key component of a critique that you are clearly missing is to say why.

Bob Ross paints by using quick simple techniques using 2" brushes and palette knives so he can fill a 16x20 canvas in 30 minutes. I hate to disappoint you but I did my whole painting with a size 1 and size 2 round brush. You ask where is my personality in the painting, I ask you, Where are your eyes and open mind? Can you tell me how this is "Bob Ross"?

I am not by any means saying that I think I am great at painting. I am still in high school and have a lot more to learn. Why don't you spend your 30 seconds writing 2 sentences trying to help someone learn rather than just boosting your poor ego? Any experienced artist will tell you that the development of a truly unique style that fits you personally takes a lot of time and evolves over time.

Thanks everyone else for the valid and very useful critiques! It is clear that this community is filled with a lot of great members. It's too bad that there are a few that waste away their time by making pointless comments.
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Re: Temperature Inversion

Keep going freeskier. Your talent shows thru loud and clear and I think Bob Ross would be a bit on the jealous side. My only critique is I would wish to see more of your great talent.........John
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