Surreal Sea

[tonyjazz]

MY IMAGE(S):



GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Surreal Sea
Year Created: 2007
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Board
Dimension: 16 x 20
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
Wanted to experiment with something. Used a lot of masking tape. Different horizons, rays, colors.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Have I gone mad?

[Grunge]

Cool! I love the trees. they are nicely quirky with the way they seem to grow out of the sides of the rocks. the sky is looking great, the land forms are looking good, and the water is wonderful. I love the waves. You get a real sense of the sea here.

Okay...a couple of things are bothering me on this one and I think they are mostly design issues. first is the moon. I dont think you need it here...and it looks like the sun (which should be busy throwing those rays across the painting). would we see a full moon with the sun at that angel? I don't know. I'm just throwing it out there. anyway, i find the moon distracting and when I look at the painting as a whole, I don"t think you need it.

Next, those rays, while masterfully done, are a little too crisp at their edges and a little too opaque. I can see through them only well enough to know that there is something behind them that I can't see very well. this bothers my eye. especially in that area where the tree is rooted to the rock. I want to see what is going on there. Those rays tend to make the light more of a distraction than an enhancement. they are done in great colours that really work well here, but I wonder if you couldn't sprinkle those colours where the light hits things and leave the ray effect out. Just my humble opinion, as always. It will probably sell at your next gig and this will all be for naught.

Oh, one more thing...the water line on the landform closest on the right. the line strikes me as too straight. that land mass should curve outward. I like the effect of seeing beneath the water at the left edge of this landform. very cool! Okay, I'm done.

[tonyjazz]

Grunge, Thanx for looking, I'm glad you liked it. Thanx for the honest critiques, I Love it. Seems I'm not going mad, having fun, actually. Just doing whatever came into my head. Masking tape, I used it a lot on this for those effects, plan to use it more. I saw a painting by Homer Aguilar, this painter has got some incredible techniques in masking. I got inspired by that to mess around with this one. Grunge, if I sell this one you get a commision .....//||\\ Thanx again, Tony Jazzzzzzzz

[jbercx]

Tony I agree with Grunge, but I love the sea and the waves! Did you consider to make the painting without the rays? I think i will be a great painting without the rays.

[Nichoolaas]

the lines give it that artificial/unreal feel.
I dont agree tthat the rays are bad at all. they make the painting i reckon. without them it would just be a picture of the sea with an odd horizon thing going on.

And you probably have gone mad.... might be a good thing.

[Andrewcody]

I agree with Grunge.
I understand you are after a surreal feel to the work but this means you must have some structure to how you will translate your ideas.
The two horizons for example, ok, and the two mounds in the sea, one with a tree the other without, refelctive of the flood? Possible. The serene sea the aftermath? The birds bringing the message of hope, the rays the original rainbow? yabbaddayibbidda yes all open to translation.

But is that what you meant?

[marcopicos]

I agree with the opinion that the rays are too invasive in the painting. I would probably paint them far away, over the distant mountain. And make something more strange in the front, some kind of animal or something...

[tonyjazz]

jbercx: Thanx for looking. And thanx for your comments! I like the rays.

Nicholas: Thanx for sharing in the humor of going mad! I just had fun with this one. Your right about the odd lines. I did that intentionally. Surrealism! I really enjoyed working without preset notions on " how it should look " I wanted " How does this make you feel ". I'm practicing to do mirrors. I saw a painter do this and it just started the juices flowing. Thanx for your comments.

Andrew, no this is not what I meant. I wanted to be free to paint! To feel the brush do whatever it wanted plus, I had fun. Thanx for sharing your comments, I appreciate them.


Marcopicos: Honest critiques. Thanx.....the idea of placing them back farther is quite interesting to me.

[Andrewcody]

Hmm you control the brush.
The brush is a tool