Here's the cable car

[tremblad]

MY IMAGE(S):



GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Here's the cable car
Year Created: 2006
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Wood
Dimension: 12x16
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
Please don't laugh at me! I'm just an amator trying to have fun! And I am having fun even if the result is generally unacceptable!

My last attempt. Very quick (less than 90 minutes). I was going for a "free style", just put paint in the canvas and see how it will come out. I had a reference photo but did not try to reproduce it exactly.

I realize that when you don't want to paint details in a painting, we must be very careful about perspective, choice of colors, composition and design. I think this attempt lacks on these three aspects and I will have to keep practicing because I like this style ...

Let me know honestly what you think ...

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Should I try to improve it or should I consider this one a study and pass on to another one?

[Brandt Sponseller]

I definitely wouldn't laugh at you. There is nothing unacceptable about this. This is very nice, attractive work. Your colors, perspective, composition, etc. all work well for me.

Before I even read your comments I was going to comment on the energy you communicate--it looks like it was painted in a frenzy. That really comes across in the work in a good way. It get the impression of a hot, tropical island, with the artist capturing the cable car plein air before it's gone. That also gives a nice contrast to the more usual laid-back attitude of such places.

Re your last question, I wouldn't work on this much beyond a couple tiny touch-ups if something is really annoying you. It shouldn't really change perceptibly to most viewers, or you'll lose all those positive aspects I mentioned above.

[Blayne]

Daniel, I see from this and from the thumbnails you posted that your work is beautiful. No one is going to laugh at your talent!

[pampe]

chaming!


I really like the nergy also

The only thing you might consider....is breaking up the pink triangle on the lower right

[Corby]

What Brandt said, plus the fact it is the sort of thing I personally get a great deal of pleasure out of by a constant examination...new things appear! This is avery salable piece and far from laughable. Keep your painting up, walking in this same path of work! It has growth potential.

[dab]

I love it!!!!

[tremblad]

I'll comment on your kind comments and then, I'll do my self-critic.

First, I was really really thinking that this attempt was like a child painting, something anybody can do with no knowledge at all. But, I personally like that kind of style and wanted to get some feedback. Thank you for having taken time to give your feedback. Once I'll get better, I will be able to give back to others what you're giving me with your critics!

Brandt, you show me a new English word: frenzy. I checked in my English dictionary and I think that effectively describe how I felt while I was doing this attempt. Kind of a transe! You also use the word "artist" which is way too much for me!

Blayne, you also used a word which is too much for me: talent. Not sure I have some!

Corvus, salable? Really? Your last phrase ("it has growth potential") really really touched me!

Tx Pampe and Dab.

About my self-critic now.



I guess the perspective would have been better if the base of the car would follow the green line. But, then, the rails should follow the long blue line. Too late to correct that in my opinion. Next time.

I don't really like the right foreground (big yellow circle). It doesn't look as the same street as the background (little yellow circle). So, I agree about Pampe's comment.

Finally, I think I have some shadows problem. Considering the shadow of the car on the street, there should be some shadows of tree in the front of the car. I'm not sure that would add interest in the painting however.

Overall, and your comments reinforce that, I am satisfied with it!

Thanks again everone for looking and commenting!