Glad to see you on this "jag"
Sometimes we fight the surface we work on. The machined linear look of the paper you used for this painting is interfering with the nice image you tried to convey. Next time, try Canson paper (the felt, or regular side) to see how your pastel projects the subject. Then if you like the lines of the paper return to this surface.
I find that when using pastel even for a couple of years, battling the pattern of the paper can be problematic. For the delicacy of the subject you painted, lots of pastel was lost to the lines. In spite of this, you did a good job of not blending and retained the liveliness of the paint.