Commission -- WIP -- Help Requested (X-Post Portraiture)

[bethanyt]

Hi Felix, this is much a stronger drawing and clearer likeness. Still push the darks to make it to the finish!
Hope this helps.
Use Bill's close-up photos to compare the shapes again, and to get those defining darks, and sharpen the eyes.

[Bongo1]

Here's the latest. This one's close to being done, I think. The eyes are still not lined up properly; have had real trouble trying to align them without throwing something else off. But I've pushed the darks considerably from the prior version and tried to make the mouth area and nose shape more accurate.

I'd love to get your thoughts -- and thanks so much for the fantastic input and the time that everyone's taken to help me with this drawing.

[bethanyt]

Hey- this is the best version yet, Felix! I think just lose the high-light on the nose bridge on the left side- it is throwing off the shape of the top of the nose and the shape of the inner eyes. Is the hair really this bright- if so, put some cooler browns in to just tone it down a tad.
Minor tweaks now- good stuff!

[carolkay]

Some good advice--aaaaaaaand its looking great.

[mburrell]

You have a good feel for her now, those weak will help and maybe some dark and light highlights in the hair to give it some rhythms and to break up the flatness into texture. Smooth out her arms so the eye is not drawn to them. Well done.
Mike