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Old 01-04-2011, 07:03 AM
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Rusting power Please move to structured.

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Title: Rusting power
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Medium: Pencil
Surface: Watercolor Paper
Dimension: A2
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A piece I've been working on for my portfolio.
I know the elipse at the bottom of the wheel is off; any other tips will be welcomed.
The work is unfinished.

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Any feedback is welcomed

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Old 01-04-2011, 07:10 AM
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Re: Rusting power

Could this be moved to structured please?
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Old 01-05-2011, 10:47 PM
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Re: Rusting power Please move to structured.

Hi meritaten. I hope a moderator will come along and move this for you. I don't know why they have yet to fix this problem, we can only hope.

I like the subject matter as I also like mechanical stuff. Is your title Rusting Power or Resting Power? If it is rusting, then I would suggest more rust and peeling paint as to me it looks in pretty good shape. Good luck with your portfolio work. I think your doing fine.............Lenore
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Old 01-06-2011, 05:36 AM
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Re: Rusting power Please move to structured.

Thank you for your c&c MRSBB.
The title is Rusting power, after Charles Sheeler's magnificent painting 'Rolling power'.
His painting is of the drive wheels of a brand new steam loco'; my drawing is of the drive train of a rusty old pug loco that sits in a local park.
Once I finish the wheels and con-rod I will be adding the rusting parts to the left, (i have no idea what that cylindrical bit is called).

Sheeler's painting can be seen here:
http://industrialart.industrialartif...art_usa_21.htm

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Re: Rusting power Please move to structured.

few things..

comparing the ref to drawing-



get in the habit of squinting your eyes...and do so now, and see that you have much more shadowing happening (within circled areas) than you are representing. The result of not emphasizing the darker values is that this will then flatten the 3 dimensional depth perspective and illusion of your work. Better to over-exaggerate this value contrast, than understate it...

Secondly...your wheel is not round. It has three distinct flat edges that would cause this train car to bounce...



When creating the illusion of depth, do not think across your paper, or up and down. Think of it in visual terms more like a cube...

In this simple illustration of a scene...the visual balance must also include what goes back in space-



Take this reference of a place I like to paint at...



here is how you must think then to execute such a drawing/painting as it should be...



...the point being then, you need to see that the deepening of the values representing the planes going away from the eye will then be like each plane of the landscape above going back. Fail to represent each plane with adequate enough value rendering, and you flatten the illusion...
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Old 01-06-2011, 11:21 AM
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Thank you Mr Seiler, thant's fantastic.
I knew there was something off but i couldn't see the wood for the trees.
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