Thanks for the gentle feedback Geoff - I was in two minds about putting this one up but I'm now glad that I did.
The 's' is particularly bad - not least because I did it incorrectly - here's a comparison of what it should have been to what I actually did (sorry for the poor picture, my printer/scanner has crossed over):
After I messed up the first 's' I had no choice but to do the others the same way. I had no more paper nor time to do it right. I'm now regretting that I let it go like this :-(
The decoration was my rather clumsy attempt to link the two as a pair.
How would you recommend doing the English version?