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Old 08-21-2018, 05:52 PM
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Al Amir - Structured Critique Please

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Title: Al Amir - Structured Critique Please
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Dimension: 24 x 30
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This is a painting of my own horse from a photograph I took. I started with a direct painting approach and quickly realized I was being confused by the colors changes and switched to a grisaille with several glazed in colors. It's still wet, so applicable changes will be made.

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This is my first indirect attempt and I loved it. Had challenges with using too much medium. Be brutal, all critique welcomed, open and structured. Looking for every possible improvement. Any way to make a fun of the mill equine portrait into something more striking? Composition tips?
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Old 08-22-2018, 01:41 AM
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Re: Al Amir - Structured Critique Please

WOW !!! This is beautiful. I have nothing to say but keep up the great work.
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Old 08-22-2018, 11:44 AM
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Re: Al Amir - Structured Critique Please

Beautiful painting - but, take this with a grain of salt, because it might be how my monitor is interpreting the image:

My critique is that the horse looks more like a bronze statue than a real horse - it's very "hard" looking and missing some softness to indicate some fur. I think this painting would benefit from some soft edges, especially the body - maybe softening/blending to the background?.

Like I said, in real life, what I said about the painting might not mean anything - I love the colors, the play on dark/light is awesome and the background doesn't take anything away from the star of the show - the horse!
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Beautiful painting - but, take this with a grain of salt, because it might be how my monitor is interpreting the image:

My critique is that the horse looks more like a bronze statue than a real horse - it's very "hard" looking and missing some softness to indicate some fur. I think this painting would benefit from some soft edges, especially the body - maybe softening/blending to the background?.

Like I said, in real life, what I said about the painting might not mean anything - I love the colors, the play on dark/light is awesome and the background doesn't take anything away from the star of the show - the horse!
Thank you! Yes, it does look a bit plastic even in real life though a bit less so than in the photos. I tried to move away from the Draw Every Hair method of my colored pencil pieces but I still need to learn how to manipulate edges and brushwork in a way to suggest hair.
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Thank you! Yes, it does look a bit plastic even in real life though a bit less so than in the photos. I tried to move away from the Draw Every Hair method of my colored pencil pieces but I still need to learn how to manipulate edges and brushwork in a way to suggest hair.




I am not a fan of "draw every hair" - what you need to do is just find areas where you want to suggest fur/hair, without worrying about suggesting it everywhere - good places to look at is in folds/joints, where dark meets light and highlights - the viewers eyes will fill in the rest. I think that would take this piece from lovely to outstanding - for me, you have everything else
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Re: Al Amir - Structured Critique Please

gorgeous!
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I am not a fan of "draw every hair" - what you need to do is just find areas where you want to suggest fur/hair, without worrying about suggesting it everywhere - good places to look at is in folds/joints, where dark meets light and highlights - the viewers eyes will fill in the rest. I think that would take this piece from lovely to outstanding - for me, you have everything else

I think the compression of the photos took out some detail.



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Re: Al Amir - Structured Critique Please

gorgeous color and painting!

I think you may have used Fibonacci spiral, but I think it could be tweaked to sit within the sprial to become a little more balanced.

The other crit would be to use more warmth in the shadows, almost burnt sienna tones, to help make it seem less plastic/statue, and create some living depth.






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Wow, great job. Not too many horse artists get the muzzle and especially the nostrils correct. You've nailed it!

I find her eye just a tad too small (great job on the iris though!)

I love the lighting, but I think you should use it to give her some longer whiskers. I see you have some in the close up, but they are very short and don't show in the larger photo.

The forelock needs to be a little imperfect. It is slicked down on her face like the little hair she has up there has a ton of conditioner on it. Give it a little body with hairs coming off the surface of her face.

You've done an amazing job on the leather halter!

I realize that you posted this a while ago, so it might be too late to do these changes if you like my suggestions.

Overall, a VERY nicely done portrait of a beauty!
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