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Old 06-17-2019, 02:42 PM
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Untitled

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Title: In Passing, The Orkneys, UK
Year Created:2019
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Linen
Dimension: 24 x 24
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MY COMMENTS:
I think I missed the mark with this painting. I used a sketch from my Uncle's sketchbook he used while stationed in the UK in 1943 during WWII.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
I would appreciate any comments or suggestions to help me improve this painting .
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Old 06-18-2019, 11:47 AM
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Re: Untitled

two things ... the charm of the swooped roof, i think, is necessary ... and the pond, perhaps not the best choice - the rolling hills, again, are more charming because they place the church atop a hill, probably overlooking a village. the upswoop of line directly left of the church (edge of canvas) should swoop downward so as not to block the entrance and also maintain the higher elevation of the building.

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Old 06-18-2019, 01:00 PM
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Re: Untitled

I think La's critique is to the point.

In general, your painting is not merely a different interpretation of the sketch. It is an entirely different thing, in terms of mood and setting. So, you should regard the painting as stand-alone; would have been better to not show us the sketch for comparison.

The sketch's church on a hill makes sense, in terms of human habitation. But the church with pond and woods is more like a nature scene, into which you have inserted a church as point of interest. That is, why would a church be there?

To put this another way: The painting, as painting, is very good. As a composition, it is somewhat off-target. That's where the original sketch hits its mark.

I like the painted sky. The use of sun behind the cloud is especially good. Many other artists would erroneously put a large circle there. Generally, choice of color and shape is good.

Substantially the same painting might have been better, if part of the central, distant woods were instead fields, with barely visible habitations. Then the church would make sense in context. Likewise, the pond might have something on shore, suggesting its usage in an agricultural context (but without adding distracting cows).

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