I think you did a nice job on this.
I do like the strong color,typical indeed for her technique.
I remember I also did her pear and found it also hard to achieve what I wanted,it took a lot of time to get what I liked.
You outlined the pear to strong (green) and bolt and lost depth because of that.
Important is to use a sharp point to outline a subject like this .
If you draw more till the edge than it will be a big improvement.
The colours are not very muddy I think,just work in light layers.
And blend the solvent in a tapping motion. (not to big movements)
I cutted it in photoshop,and you will notice it will be a bit more natural .
btw,which brand pencils and paper did you used?