I would appreciate any feedback...

[Jerry Campbell]

I thought I might post this and see if I get any responses.
I started with a 10x10 plein air piece:



My intention was to enlarge it (to 20x20), and give it the appearance of being under water, like at the bottom of a lake. Here's the first stage:



And here's where I am now:



I would appreciate any comments on how successful this effort is, as an image in general, and as an 'underwater' effect. Thank you.


www.jerrycampbell.blogspot.com

[chalet_dor]

Hi Jerry

I am no artist only a want to be one.............IMHO I love your first painting............ interesting idea........... I love your original best

In fact just call it........... At The Bottom of the Lake. .........dor)

[yakker0117]

Interesting concept. However, I doubt that the street light would be operating at the bottom of a lake!!

[lumiere33]

I saw your painting first without reading what you wrote and I thought that it was a foggy atmosphere you wanted to show. for an underwater scene, I'd have more different dark blue and more blurred objects.

[Pioneer33]

Such beautiful handling and glub glub it definitely looks underwater. I liked the luminescence of the second painting better. I say you succeeded except for the objects are too clearly defined to be under water; There would be some distortion. OK...so you painted what it looks and feels like to swim with the fishes. In a dreary river bottom...why?

[Aires]

I think this works very well as a gloomy, dank, rainy day with everything sloshing around in water. But everything is too defined for underwater, no water movement, no distortion of lines, no colors to suggest water. One wouldn't find lights on and objects in place as above ground. The concept is good, perhaps worth another go at it and think water first, and how the objects would look under water??? It's a tantalizing idea and well worth more thought about underwater scenes. Please don't take this amiss, I personally love something like this that challenges both my thinking and my ability to get my thoughts on canvas. Tantalizing idea, keep panting!!!

[manfrommerriam]

I lke it very much but it does not say underwater as well as it says snowy night. You need to introduce things that float around. Maybe some fish. Some bubbles. Would that street light be lit? Would some of those boxes be likely to float? The surfaces would have a pattern of moving streaks/stripes caused by light coming through waves above. How about a scuba diver? Maybe a little castle and goldfish.
Have fun, Dave

[brush49]

I far prefer your original, but see the potential in the larger piece. There are two specific things that do catch my attention.

The hard line separating the values on the vehicle window is not consistent with the diffuse light source from the top of the work. My eye went right to this and simply would not let go; it keeps coming back to that hard line.

The relatively high values in the foreground also make one ask - where is all this light coming from?

I do like the way you have muted the colors and all but eliminated the warm tones, that would be expected with an aqueous "filter".

The original has a sense of life to it, and comes across as a spontaneous expression of what caught your eye in the first place. I would have no problem displaying it in my home. Wish my plein air studies looked as nice!

[karenlee]

I like the third version a lot but it does not look like underwater; it looks like a snowy evening in Michigan! But what's wrong with that? It has a lot of atmosphere. The values are wonderfully executed.
If you really want it to look like it's all underwater, I would recommend that you visit an underwater urban area and make some quick small studies. Unfortunately, no one will recognize it as an underwater urban area because that's not part of our collective unconscious. I'm not kidding...in a painting of a landscape, viewers intuitively recognize when a landscape is right. That's what makes a great landscape painting successful.
Just my two cents!

[brown belly]

lakes can be eerie and the last one is a eerie/

[tylerminix1231]

Personally, I far prefer the latest interpretation! It's eerie but it also has a sense of simplistic beauty. I can't explain why it draws my attention, but I just found myself looking and scrolling past the first two without much thought outside of the usual comments; but the last....the last just speaks to me. It' tells a story of sorts. I know, I know....it sounds strange, but I can't escape it. well done!

I LOVE it
God bless you for sharing

[M.L. Schaefer]

I think this is great...not the underwater look you wanted, no. Instead the look of snow, cold, and night. The perfect misty atmosphere, and you "made it" yourself! Not everyone could do that!

Its as if I were looking outside an upstairs window at below zero temperature! It has that feel!

Kiwi

[chalet_dor]

Hi Jerry
I would like to see some feed back from you please! I still like your plein air piece best. I have even gone to your website to see if I could find it. What have you done with this painting?..........dor)