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Old 08-04-2017, 05:40 AM
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Title: View of the Otahu
Year Created: 2017
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 508mm x 405mm
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

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Wanted to capture the feel of winter in the New Zealand countryside.

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Looking for feedback on the composition and the detail in the foreground.

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Old 08-04-2017, 09:35 AM
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I like the look and feel. Good job.
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Thanks, kin3. Appreciate it. 😊
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I love the foreground.
Such a large area of sky could use a bit more drama to balance the whole painting and connect it together..
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Thanks, tj84. What did you mean by drama? Sorry I didn't go to art school if that's a technical term. 😬
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Re: View of the Otahu

nice contrast, composition and atmospheric perspective, but is it really that blurry in real life? i would hope the foreground twigs and such are nice and crisp.

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Re: View of the Otahu

I didn't go to art school either, but been studying & learning since 2004..
Basically drama means something to give more interest.. colors, brush work, some sort of movement..any of those.. (you do have some movement /brushwork)
See how the clouds are divided horizontally lights vs darks.. and the foreground makes another horizontal zone..
Generally if sky is the larger area it should have some sort of interest /drama/impact... but as the artist - your choice of course..

One way to test- scroll down so part of the top dark sky is cropped off by your screen
does the painting look better or more balanced?
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Some past threads on skies...
http://www.wetcanvas.com/forums/show...ighlight=skies
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Thanks for the links! I get what you mean now by drama. 👍🏼
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nice contrast, composition and atmospheric perspective, but is it really that blurry in real life? i would hope the foreground twigs and such are nice and crisp.

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Hi, La. The blurriness is probably due to the downsizing of the photo.
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Re: View of the Otahu

Maybe you can post a link to a better quality image.
I think you did a fantastic job with the sky.
I think it gives kind of a cold lifeless feel. The trees seem really dark and contrast'y and draw a lot of my attention. Do you mind if they are so much of the focus?
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I like how the skies and the ground are grouped to three areas. I don't know how cold the winters in New Zealand are but if you would like to make the image look cold I would make the ground colors go more towards cold hues. Now they are quite warm ochres ,greens and reds.
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Re: View of the Otahu

If you look at each block as it were of horizontal space ie the russet ground red tones then moving up to the white band of sky then to the last dark grey band of sky they actualy move in an increasing growing scale what this does to the eye is it makes it travel from top of pic frame to bottom of frame in that direction however to be honest is it relevant I ask myself ..you could say psycologicaly speaking people may feel prefer the eye to move in a diminishing scale which would be opposite to this and the eye would travel from ground to sky. Upto you. However anyway these are all things that can be learnt.Hope it makes sense what I am saying as I tend to look at things more as forces...so in gravity the ground is bottom etc so weight should be at bottom etc and get lighter to the top ie take eye to the top. You could look at contrast brightness darkness etc to bring more weight to the bottom or you could look at having a stronger contrast in the fore ground where the reds are and then at top sky the dark grey could be the opposite of that contrast you use for the reds ie much fainter or such.
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