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Old 09-05-2019, 03:59 PM
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How is my comp?

This is a small gouache painting of our hot water tank.
I would appreciate a critique of my composition and
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Old 09-06-2019, 11:30 AM
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Re: How is my comp?

Texture, shadow, depth, color, brush stroke, all very well handled. But imo are lost in the low saturation/low contrast treatment. I don't know if that was your intention or just how the photo came out. I took the liberty to boost contrast and saturation to demonstrate what I mean.

It is in the end a matter of taste. But whatever your taste you did an excellent job imo of rendering a "boring" subject in an interesting way.
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Old 09-06-2019, 12:04 PM
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Re: How is my comp?

You might have better luck getting feedback in the Open Critique forum.

Since most of the painting uses muted colors, I think the bright white shape in the top left corner and the bright yellow/orange shape on the left are saying "Look at me! Look at me!" The greenish shape on the right makes sense ... it's a wall and a corner, right?

But I'm not sure what's happening on the left side; my brain is asking "what is that white shape? what is that yellow/orange shape? what happened to the wall?" (The wall clearly intersects with the floor on the right side, but not on the left. I assume a continuous wall behind the water heater, but based on the implied intersection with the floor, the wall on the right is farther away than the wall on the left, which doesn't make sense.)

It's like 3/4 of the painting is realism, with 1/4 abstract, and it's a little confusing for me personally.
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Old 09-06-2019, 06:53 PM
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Re: How is my comp?

Thanks theBongolian for taking the time to comment on this.
It was my intention to have subtle color and contrast in this.
Similar to Giorgio Morandi. (photo attached)

It's not everyone's cup of tea but I wanted to give it a try.
I do like your version better.

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Old 09-06-2019, 07:08 PM
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Re: How is my comp?

Thanks for commenting lorianikins.
The orange thing is the side of a couch and
the bright area is a lit up area of the wall
......I have it too light. I will darken it.

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Old 09-07-2019, 07:54 PM
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Re: How is my comp?

comp and colors are fine, but values are a bit soft ... not everything needs to be high contrast, but i think with such a mundane/utilitarian subject matter it might be worth it to punch it up a bit.


what size canvas?

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Old 09-09-2019, 08:50 PM
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Re: How is my comp?

Thanks La, This 5"x7" on watercolor paper.
I agree. I'm going to redo this one and post it again.
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Old 09-11-2019, 02:06 PM
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Re: How is my comp?

Here's the revised version.

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