Originally Posted by Spenser
I finished this painting about an hour before your Compositions from Photos class on Saturday, so I would like your thoughts on this painting. How would I fix the straight line of the curb? Are the telephone poles considered clones? Does the closest pole lead the eye out of the painting, or does the turret roof behind it, and the wires keep the viewer in? Is the sky getting too much empty real estate? (sky does have gradient colour that doesn't show much in the photo). Oh, and the ohhh so many triangles!
Is the painting unbalanced, with so much on the right and so little on the left?
I have a couple of others similar I want to paint, so would like to know what not to do. ( I have corrected the sidewalk that appears to be too high before disappearing behind the cars, but this photo was taken prior to that).
It is acrylic, 16x20. Thank you for any comments.
You did a good job with this painting. The way to slow down visual movements on straight lines is to a) match the value with the adjacent shapes and/or b) add broken pieces of concrete and grooves. If you study Mian Situ's work you will see he encounters this straight line issue quite often. Notice how he has little breaks in these lines.
I do not feel there is a balance problem because most of your painting is in Mid Value. What makes a painting tilt are the darks not the square inches of visual information, so the very fact that you have buildings on one side and not on the other does not make the painting lean. However had you put a real dark tree on the right then you would have a balance problem. An easy way to tell is convert your painting into a gray scale.
I do not feel the telephone poles are clones because their heights are dramatically different.
The only areas I feel you could improve:
1) The sky has too many square inches of monotonous repetition of space. Many square inches with no visual information shifts may result into boredom. If you are taking the live class this Saturday ask me in text to expound on this.
2) I feel the cast shadow of the line that runs across the street is a bullet train. That I would change for a cast shadow produced by a tree or a building in the immediate foreground. It would also help to establish a gradient plane and help convey a sense of depth.