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Old 09-01-2000, 10:16 PM
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This is sketched in oil on canvas..30x30.
I haven't gotten any further because I'm not really sure about the figures and how they relate in size...this is from my imagination so I have no visual references.
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Old 09-01-2000, 10:22 PM
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This reminds me of an excercise in "blocking" for the theatre. The people in front, because they are facing toward the central figure, force your attention there, so should the people in the back. It might be that the central figure is not on the same plane as the seated figures. You might want to experiment with a few friends and a camera. I'm all for using your imagination, but a digital camera can work miracles.


A second look suggests that the central figure may be on an outcropping, so that's cool. I also noticed a nice triangle that has him at one apex and the listeners on the sides. I might look into making the gaze of the viewers more focused on the central person's face.

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Old 09-05-2000, 08:46 PM
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To me it seems like the ones at the back are left out of the group. Maybe because they're smaller or maybe because the storyteller????? has her back to them.

Wish I had an imagination!

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you're fine, carly....the two kids on the left mimic each other too much. i'd change one pose, if i were you....(M)

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You've given us almost a mannerist composition here from the angle looking down.

I'd say quickly that the size of the woman's head is too large for her shoulders and arms, and that the length of the arms from shoulder to elbow, and forearms ought both to be lengthened.

The weight of the composition builds anticipation of what you might do with the space in the upper right corner as a neutral zone, and to balance it all out. Will be interesting.

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Old 09-09-2000, 07:17 PM
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Just a thought, they are all sitting, so maybe you should add a little contrast by having one of the kids laying down - perhaps the kid with the crossed legs should lay down with legs stretching out towards the empty space to the right.

A bit like this perhaps...
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I was thinking someone with chin resting on hands looking up at storyteller.
Anyway... just an idea.
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Old 09-30-2000, 01:26 AM
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Forgot I had this posted here...thought I'd put the updated version here too...so you could see where I'm headed. Larry I changed the arms before I even read your post...lol..great minds! I wish!
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<IMG SRC="http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/storyteller.jpg" border=0> still working on composition!

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