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Old 03-14-2009, 01:26 PM
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Mother and Baby- pls move to structured critique

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Old 03-14-2009, 04:29 PM
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Re: Mother and Baby- pls move to structured critique

You've done a beautiful job here, and I really like the monochromatic scheme.
I think the mother is rendered exceptionally well, and there are only a couple of tweaks that I think could help the baby look a little 'younger'. The baby's left eye is off a bit. The upper lid looks too extended, IMO, even with the compression from the mother's arm as she is holding the baby. I also think that the baby's mouth is too wide, and that really makes him look a lot older.
Very minor observations compared to what you have adeptly accomplished here.
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Old 03-15-2009, 11:40 AM
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Re: Mother and Baby- pls move to structured critique

I believe your intent on the right forearm of the mother here is to foreshorten, but perhaps the position of the hand, the angle with which the arm goes down...something, has simply made the forearm appear stunted, Kimberly...IMO

Hands are anatomically difficult for artists to begin with...but perhaps it was trying to crunch the arm into the picture plane against the left far side, don't know.

Also..becareful where a rounded form against a darker contrast background doesn't have too harsh an edge. Edges read as details and tell us about form, and softening the edge will tell the viewer the form is rounded and goes around from front to back. You want to avoid what might otherwise appear as a cut and pasted decal kind of look...

the medium appears fun to work with...carries that classic feel to it...
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Re: Mother and Baby- pls move to structured critique

Cbcarnell- I agree that the baby's mouth is off and making it a little too old looking. I have a hard time paying attention to detail. The little tweaks seem to be the hardest for me to see.

Larry- The arm doesn't look quite right. I need to work on foreshortening quite a bit. I also appreciate you noticing the hard edges. Didn't even think about softening the. Now that you mentioned it softening the hard edges to make the figure "go all around" makes a lot of sense.

Thank you both for taking the time to help me with my techniques. This one is done and finished and I won't be making fixes to it. I'm going to be doing a series of drawing to help improve my techniques. I'll be using your pointers on the next one. You'll be seeing more of my work in the near future
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