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Old 02-09-2018, 07:54 AM
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Morning Commute

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Title: Morning Commute
Year Created: 2018
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Board
Dimension: 16" x 20"
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Hi all,
This is the second painting I have completed.
I am a beginner.
I finished this one two days ago.
It's based on my experiences on the train every morning. My observations of people on the train.
I left all but one face with features, up to you to interpret why.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
How could this have been painted better?
I struggled with faces.
I also struggled painting straight lines.
For example, the door, the line to indicate to sliding doors is not straight.
How do you paint nice straight lines?
Thanks.

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Old 02-09-2018, 10:14 AM
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Use a Mahl stick to help with straight lines.
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Old 02-09-2018, 01:53 PM
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I use a ruler

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Re: Morning Commute

It is not forbidden to use a straight edge. One way is to place the edge where you want to paint the line, then elevate this edge. Holding the straight edge with one hand and thumb on top and the fingers under, run the brush along this raised edge, allowing the bristles to contact the surface.
There's lots of tricks of the trade that you will get to know as you continue with your art
As for people and faces; there's plenty of books out there, also lots of info on the internet. If you think it will help, get yourself a manikin. They are correctly proportioned and can be bent into various positions.
Hope this is helpful. The important thing is to keep painting.
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There is nothing forbidden
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Old 02-09-2018, 09:32 PM
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I use a ruler

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I tried a ruler but when I lifted the ruler after painting I found the paint leaked under the ruler and screwed it up. Had to wipe it clean and repaint the door.
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Old 02-09-2018, 09:33 PM
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Thank you everyone for your suggestions.
I'll try get hold of a mahl stick.
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I tried a ruler but when I lifted the ruler after painting I found the paint leaked under the ruler and screwed it up. Had to wipe it clean and repaint the door.

too much paint or too much water in your paint mix
works well with oils

as to your commute, consider getting some hints of perspective (vanishing point(s)) in there someplace(s) when you do scenes like this again. you've made a cool poster of sorts, a caricature of life, but it's quite flat, one dimensional.

i quite enjoy the fella standing by the door, he's got a good lean for a stiff guy in a suit. (tho his feet are a bit low for him to be leaning, relaxed against the wall, in which case - heels under shoulders for a solid stand up kinda guy, fyi)

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You donít need to run out and buy a Mahl stick, a broomstick will work. Itís just a place to rest your hand.
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Old 02-09-2018, 10:49 PM
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too much paint or too much water in your paint mix
works well with oils

as to your commute, consider getting some hints of perspective (vanishing point(s)) in there someplace(s) when you do scenes like this again. you've made a cool poster of sorts, a caricature of life, but it's quite flat, one dimensional.

i quite enjoy the fella standing by the door, he's got a good lean for a stiff guy in a suit. (tho his feet are a bit low for him to be leaning, relaxed against the wall, in which case - heels under shoulders for a solid stand up kinda guy, fyi)

la

Thank you for your tips.
Yeah I feel like it's more a poster and flat.
I was disappointed with this one.
I am not sure how I could have given it some perspectives.
Trying to picture what you mean with how to give him a better leaning look but struggling. Do you mean the feet need to be more to the right? Not sure what you mean by being a bit low?

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Old 02-09-2018, 10:51 PM
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You donít need to run out and buy a Mahl stick, a broomstick will work. Itís just a place to rest your hand.

Noted. Thanks.
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Wonderful painting.
You have a talent for telling a story.
That transcends straightness, etc.
Don't fuss with the technicalities... you'll find ways to do them.
youtube is amazing. I hang out there and watch painters for hours. So much to learn, but we only really learn when we paint.
Tell your stories.
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Old 02-09-2018, 11:30 PM
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Wonderful painting.
You have a talent for telling a story.
That transcends straightness, etc.
Don't fuss with the technicalities... you'll find ways to do them.
youtube is amazing. I hang out there and watch painters for hours. So much to learn, but we only really learn when we paint.
Tell your stories.
Paint.

Thank you for your kind words
Yeah, I watched this artist Mark Carder's videos on his YouTube channel (https://www.youtube.com/user/DrawMixPaint). He's a very good teacher. I spent 2 hours nearly watching an oil painting from start to finish plus other videos on how to mix colours.
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Re: Morning Commute

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Thank you for your tips.
Yeah I feel like it's more a poster and flat.
I was disappointed with this one.
don't be, you're learning
I am not sure how I could have given it some perspectives. that one tiny blue triangle on the ladies seat is enough for now
Trying to picture what you mean with how to give him a better leaning look but struggling. Do you mean the feet need to be more to the right? Not sure what you mean by being a bit low?
to stand him up straight his feet should line up (vertically) with his shoulders (or at least his neck area) otherwise he's likely to fall over backwards (try standing upright like he is now).

for the lean to work his feet should be higher on the canvas (yes, this would place them closer to the wall). compare his foot placement with the red shoe lady (she's sitting how far from the wall?) (an imaginary horizontal line under their feet). he's obviously not leaning, he's just too far from the wall for it to be possible. let's just call him proud, he's in a proud, proper british stance

don't change it now anyway, move on to the next, tis a good piece and we all have to have beginning works to look back to in order to track our progresses


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Old 02-10-2018, 12:16 AM
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Re: Morning Commute

Let's just say he's fallen asleep standing and is about to fall backwards haha.
Cannot change it anyways, has 2 coats of matte varnish on it now lol.
I get what you mean now.
You mean the lady in the reddish dress? Where the perspective is?
Thank you for your tips
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