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Old 04-19-2012, 02:52 AM
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Damsel

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Title: Damsel
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Medium: Watercolor
Surface: Watercolor Paper
Dimension: 12
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Referred a foto for the form

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Form
Proportions
I am getting a feeling that something is wrong.... but just cannot get what it is. So all the critiques, suggestions are welcome friends.
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Old 04-19-2012, 08:00 AM
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Re: Damsel

Nice brushwork.

Couple of things I notice that bug my eye. The arm tapers to too thin versus the shoulder. If that's her knee by your signature, her upper leg is too short. Her butt is too big in my opinion, and her head may be a tad too small. I think her should is too far forward for her upper body.

When I draw/paint a form in my sketches I will draw a line from some arbitrary point (say the right side of her head) along the body to act like an axis. Then I can make sure the other pieces of her body/arms/etc. are in the right position.

Wait I see what others say, I may be off base totally.
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Old 04-19-2012, 02:40 PM
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Re: Damsel

ah yes, the human form - fun to paint, but the most challenging thing to master!

- neck too short?
- chest/ribcage too thick?
- distance between chin and shoulder too much?

all good things to check/measure

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Old 04-20-2012, 09:48 AM
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Re: Damsel

Tony and La .." thanks a lot." your comments have given me some direction. As they say, i have to get to the drawing board.... Literally and with a scale :-) Thanks again...

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Old 04-21-2012, 10:02 PM
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Re: Damsel

Ajit - I like your brushwork too. Approximately how long did this work take?
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Old 04-30-2012, 02:23 PM
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Re: Damsel

Hi..
This took me about a day.. I was not drying the painting with a hair dryer .... so it took me that long. But I generally don't tend to use one ;-)

Thanks for the brushwork comment. But I have to get my proportions right ;-)

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Old 04-30-2012, 11:06 PM
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Re: Damsel

I agree with Tony1
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Old 05-02-2012, 08:54 AM
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Re: Damsel

Hi Ajit, yes I also agree with Tony and La, and I also agree your brushstrokes are wonderful. I absolutely love the colours too and in fact i love all your watercolour work, you are very skilled with watercolour and have a beautiful free and easy style that works so well and you are able to capture movement, feeling and atmosphere extremely well. Can't wait for more. Cheers. Debs =))
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Old 05-25-2012, 08:38 PM
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Re: Damsel

Are you working from a model, or a photograph or is this all out of your head?
You are struggling to connect the skull to the torso. There is a lot of bone/muscle anatomy, proportion and balance to work out here. If you are working out of your head, you may want to reduce this to basic oval shapes the way animators do. Or maybe get a wooden manikin to compare the proportions to.
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