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Old 04-29-2012, 12:12 AM
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Travel Contacts

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Title: Travel Contacts
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Medium: Watercolor
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 22 x 18
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

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This is a watercolor i did from a picture taken in Nepal. I am interested in know what kind of mood or feeling this generates for people.

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I would like feedback on color, composition, use of contrast, texture and what you really like about it and what you don't like about it.
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Old 04-29-2012, 04:10 AM
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Re: Travel Contacts

I really like the texture and design elements ,especially how her skirt, shirt, and hair work together. The wooden wall feels real. I'm not sure what she is doing, but her intention is intense to me. All in all----I love this painting.
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Old 04-29-2012, 09:59 AM
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Re: Travel Contacts

I love the earthy colours and the pattern details in the skirt and shirt. Can't see her legs but am guessing she is crouching to connect or attach something together? maybe she is fixing her sandal? Love the texture in the wooden surrounds and the depth and distance in your perspective! The title is interesting but I can't connect it with the scene. I really like it though and would like to know what she is doing!!! Cheers. debs.
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Old 04-29-2012, 10:49 AM
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Re: Travel Contacts

I really like this mysterious and thoughtful image and its colors. I don't understand the title either, but it leads me to think she is embarking on a trip or move, preparing some things. She looks very pensive, deep in thought, not about what she is doing, which is a distraction she must do, but about something that's ahead. Maybe moving away, maybe a trip she's taking by herself which she is a bit reticent or apprehensive about for some reason.
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Old 04-29-2012, 10:50 AM
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Re: Travel Contacts

Is she placing something in a bottle? To put into the ocean?
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Old 04-30-2012, 06:55 AM
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Re: Travel Contacts

I don't feel any mood from it. I like the patterns you are playing with, you even almost have a pattern in her hair - I think you should break that up a bit if you want it to just be hair. Compositionally it is ok, except her face. Her eyebrow/eye is way up on her forward, compared to the nose, which is low. I can not make out what the objects are she is touching. The watercolor effects look nice in the doorframe and wall on her right.
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Re: Travel Contacts

A great palette with good textural qualities in the painting. I think that maybe she is preparing a backpack cradle.
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Re: Travel Contacts

I like it, but a little too dark for me.
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Old 04-30-2012, 02:18 PM
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Re: Travel Contacts

Very very nice. You hace worked out great details. I love the dress....
The pallette is simple and therefore pleasing... the mood is a bit somber though.
Just a thought..... try this same painting ... with the late evening or early morning sunlight on the figure.... just have a feeling that it will also be as beautiful as this.
Great work.

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Old 05-01-2012, 09:44 PM
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Re: Travel Contacts

Thanks for all the great comments. This is my wife traveling in Nepal trying to rinse her contact lenses (Mystery revealed )...no running water....hence the title "Travel contacts". I will endevour to improve the rendering of the green contact lense case she is holdling..it is a tricky angle but I should be able to clean it up.

Speaking about tricky angles the face presented a challenge...may revisit that as well.

Her hair was bleached completely white from the sun so I needed to introduce a bit of creative texturing on that part otherwise it would have been a flat white space with no contrast..perhaps there is another approach.

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Re: Travel Contacts



This is such a well executed and lovely work, I must add a few thoughts for your consideration. I hope they appear in the image above better than words.
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Old 05-05-2012, 07:52 PM
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Re: Travel Contacts

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This is such a well executed and lovely work, I must add a few thoughts for your consideration. I hope they appear in the image above better than words.

Hello,

I see some nice suggestions on the bottle. You have made some mods to the area below the water? The area is a puddle from the bottled water. Did you have some ideas for that?

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Old 05-06-2012, 02:31 AM
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Re: Travel Contacts

I was putting a small bowl there that picked up the subtle hues of the right side box. Cos you know what she is doing but the viewer would not - I think to word as a painting you must make a visual that the viewer can appreciate without reading a story.
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Re: Travel Contacts

The bottle now appears to be the focus of the work?

Has something been lost here do you think?

The bottle and the bowl colouring seem out of place in the overall picture, but perhaps this does work as introduced objects? Yes possibly.

I dont know that the work generates any mood, it feels quiet to me. Bit like a Balinese image.

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