2 same pose

[WaterMike]

I did these Monday. I like them, though I see problems now that I look at the photos. I'd be happy to hear what anyone thinks I might need to work on. I spent about 40 minutes on the first one & 20 minutes or less on the second.

[jjackm]

That area around her knee looks more finished than the rest. I think you just need more time...

[Descartes]

I think you've captured the pose well. If you wanted areas to work on I'd suggest the hands (particularly making sure the fingers are long enough) and blocking in the drapery with shadows.

[macrobertson]

I think the foot was a bit on the small side in the first one, but you seem to have fixed that in the second one, and my feeling is thatthe stronger more expressive drawing actually works better.

Mac

[wandathefish]

Good drawing, I agree that the second makes more of a statement, in part because of the strong diagonal of the thigh. vary your line width to add more interest and indicate the fall of the light.

[Bongo1]

I like the first one: peaceful values and lines, which are in keeping with the pose. The left leg looks a little thin and short, but I could be wrong.

[WaterMike]

Thanks for all the input. I do like the more "expressive" drawing, I think, but I beleive I need to do a "normal" drawing before I do these. I like the idea, Wanda, of varying the line width - that hadn't occurred to me but it sounds like common sense now.

[kirants]

I love the both, but am partial to the first one. Perhaps the softness and the delicate development of forms translate well with the feminity of the figure ? What am impressed with most is how identical the two are, which could mean two things. Your sense of proportions are consistently good, or consistently bad. Surely it is the former I think the movement is fantastic in this piece and the diagonal composition works great in taking our eye through the whole figure. Terrific work for 40 minutes

So, how long do these poses last in all? Do you get opportunity to work on a single pose for 3 hours or more ?

[WaterMike]

Thanks Kiran. I think I am improving a bit & I do think these are pretty accurate. The model is small & I think the proportions are pretty close (I didn't make the head too small! which is a common problem for me).
After some quick warm ups, we usually get about 2 hours worth of a pose, with breaks of course, assuming I stay til the end. I often feel stuck after 40 or so minutes on a pose, though, so often don't go longer. I need to develop some patience and maturity in my old age.