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plotnine
12-10-2002, 11:20 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/12-10-2002/13863_22b.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Veg and a mouse
Year Created: 2002
Medium: Watercolor
Surface: Watercolor Paper
Dimension: 15
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I dont like still life, prefer sky,mountains,sea etc but my teacher keeps banging on about how good still life practice is so I finally had a go.

I emailed Rod in NZ about cabbages I hopr I took some of his advice.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Anythin constuctive would be welcome.

I prefer nourishment to punishment.

Paintonbrush
12-10-2002, 05:13 PM
I see the mouse.....cute
watch out, you might be good at this......do more..then decide
smashing success for first one, I'd say

Gilberte
12-10-2002, 05:15 PM
Welcome with your first posting.
Very nice clear, clean coloring. But a little stiff ... ???

giniaad
12-10-2002, 08:18 PM
crisp clean lines...are acceptable...
technically it is ok
(though, the mouse's tail would not be that long after body length behind fruit...mouse could go IMHO)

what is missing is life...how it really is
and perhaps more contrast...
seat things better...delete floating

the fruits have skins with character...
showing their individual characters
would give this more grit...more character
same goes for the table, background and pot...

all in all, it is a very good first...
you just had to get more "into it"
which would be difficult,
especially if you did not want to in the first place...
you obviously have talent...
get inspired with it...

artbabe21
12-10-2002, 09:52 PM
keep painting and you'll see differently---show us more...
great color...loosen up?

plotnine
12-16-2002, 12:19 PM
Thanks for all the constructive pointers, I must admit I was a little concerned about exposing my paintings to the big wide world at first.

I accept the points that a number of members made about "looseness". I was an Engineer all my working life so it comes hard to forget that odd thousandths of an inch.

Any way thanks again
:)

Alan Cross
12-16-2002, 12:49 PM
First welcome to WC, good to have you here.....as said your painting is good but is a bit stiff. Try using bigger brushes. Go outside the lines.........
Alan :)

Gavinart
12-16-2002, 01:25 PM
The mouse takes away from the whole.

If cropped differently, i think it would benefit. Find red in green is a nice journey as well.

The bucket on the left looks transparent, and the ovals are somewhat odd.

The blue color (turnip?) is what I like best.