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amanda
04-06-2000, 06:43 PM
Could you please let me know what you think of this landscape. It was done as a practice in acrylics.

http://oddsocks.net/pics/landscape2.JPG

shelewis
04-06-2000, 08:34 PM
well, it seems that you REALLY wanted some feedback on this painting since you posted it a NUMBER of times!! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif I am not sure what it is about it, but I think the perspective is a slight bit distorted. Was that your intention? The clouds all seem to revolve around the center of the painting and the hills in the foreground also point in to the middle. The colors are nice but the perspective thing bothers me. I'm not the greatest at critiques, but this is just what I see. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif
Paula

Greybear
04-06-2000, 08:54 PM
I was thinking the same thing. Everything seem to point to the middle. I'm not well versed at critiques but stick around, Moer knowlegeable people are on their way!

arlene
04-06-2000, 08:56 PM
i'd like to know what you're looking for in a critique, and how do you consider your style. The I think we could critique the piece better.

Also, there is a delete button on the bottom of the reply page, and you can delete all the extra posts. Please.

[This message has been edited by arlene (edited April 06, 2000).]

william
04-06-2000, 09:22 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/landscape21.jpg -My first impression was pleaseant and your painting
caught my attention.
-Like the colors and light. They remind me a place where I lived once.
-Like the wide space.

My "advice" ;0)
I don't agree with the prespective "bug" from the posts before.
- You have strong lines that come from a focus. why not put
something there to reinforce it. Some big trees; a house...

- I think the sky could be improved with a darken tone in the top. I'm
founding it a bit dull.

I guess you have an overall problem... you put to much white in your mixes.
white gives your painting an overall sensation of gray.
As you are using Achrilyc you can take advantage on is transparency.
Sometime ago i learned a technique from a British watercolorist that I use often.
To achive light and color give a glaze of pale yellow ochre or raw sienna in the entire theme, just leaving
white the areas you realy want to be white. The you can put over the colors you want
because they are sustained by the under "yellow"

I tried to give some yellow to the land in the edited picture to make me clear.

The bushes (?) that divides the land... and the flowers in the bottom right corner are too hard... i guess you made it with the points of your brushes. I they are to hard and fighting with the soft work you did in the rest.

Hope you understand my spell...
My opinion and PERSONAL taste...Keep the good work.




[This message has been edited by william (edited April 06, 2000).]

kayemme
04-06-2000, 09:33 PM
this piece reminds me of a friend of mine's work of our Palouse Valley here in Eastern Washington...

i actually like the composition.. i feel that the clouds offer another eye leader to the right part of the painting, throught the mountains, then over the hills back and forth throughout the whole piece.

what does bother me, though, is the patch of field that somewhat vertically overlays some other hills.. why is it laying on top of the other hills?

i think it's importannt to mention what style you're aiming for.. this piece is very stylized.. i really enjoy it (except for that blanket of something on those hills).

wbs so i know what your aim is http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif



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cagathoc
04-06-2000, 10:52 PM
km: those are distant mountains...

Amanda:
This piece is enchanting and the colors are yummy. The movement is really nice; it's lyrical.


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"What if imagination and art are not, as many of us might think, the frosting on life, but the fountainhead of human experience?" - Rollo May from The Courage to Create

henrik
04-07-2000, 03:41 AM
Hi, a real attention grabber, and I mean it in a positive way! You got a very strong focus point which is good.

What I found as a problem is that there is too much to lead the eye of canvas. The sloping of the hills and the straight lines gives the piece too much "downward motion" IMO. So, I pushed some paint around on your picture. I think I removed some of the "fish-eye" lens effect of the piece... ah - words are not enough - well anyway - see for yourself if you like it...
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/landscape2-hl1.jpg
(The field to the left does not look particularily good after my edits, so please ignore the ligh/shading - heavy squinting is recommended http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif )

[This message has been edited by henrik (edited April 07, 2000).]

amanda
04-07-2000, 04:31 AM
Thank you all for your really nice replies. I couldn't believe it this morning when I got up and found that my post had been posted about 10 times. That was an accident not an attention seeking thing. Actually, this is the first time I have ever posted a critique in this forum personally so thank you for not commenting about the mistake. I am wondering though if it's my fault because at no point did the page tell me that teh post was succesful. It always said 'server failure' or 'flooded, try again in a moment' so I just kept trying as you could see. I have deleted all the other posts - once again sorry about that.

Thank you to those of you who said that it is 'enchanting'. This piece is actually completley made up in a painting exercise. I didn't think that it was all gathered in the middle as I tried to put the focus point off to the left. For me, the clouds are my favourite part but thanks for the advice about making them darker at the top.
I will have a good rethink of the piece and see how it comes out.
Thanks again : )

kayemme
04-07-2000, 04:40 AM
Originally posted by cagathoc:
km: those are distant mountains..

they don't look like distant mountains..
it looks like a blanket on top of the hills in FRONT of distant mountains.

i don't think that part reads well.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/landscape.JPG

now that i look at it a bit, they might be trees?
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[This message has been edited by kayemme (edited April 07, 2000).]

sandyartist
04-07-2000, 09:28 AM
Amanda..you have plenty here already to think about, compositionally..when I first saw the painting I was immediately hit by the lack of a center of interest...all those directional lines pointing to ..what? In planning a painting, you must ask yourself what it is about?, then how best to show or express that concept. If you don't have a clear concept, the effort will fail..sort of, like saying a lot of words that are not put in sentence form...the meaning will not come through. I realize this was an exercise to play with the medium...we all do that..just next time, when you are going to do a serious painting..get that concept down first. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gifKeep experimenting..that is the best teacher..the drama and boldness you show in this piece will hold you in good stead!!