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oleCC
04-03-2000, 01:44 PM
Hi Deb Wow....really nice. I would like to see a bit more definition in her face, since you do have it showing the jeans buckles etc.
The leg that is behind needs a touch more shadow to push it back, as is it kinda runs into the leg that is forward. I love your colors, and since I chiefly work in watercolor don't feel qualified to say more.
I like it a lot !! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

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henrik
04-03-2000, 02:43 PM
Wonderful Deb,
I agree with OleCC's comment. One thing that I find a bit distracting is the white rimlight on the lower part of her right leg - I think it would look better if the rim light was removed from the knee down. On her left leg the white highlights on thigh looks a bit too bright (I know jpeg's sometimes does that - does it look that way in the original?).

There is something peculiar about the angle of face vs. hat - or maybe it is the light "line" on the underside of the brim - sorry about not being very helpful about this....

Deb
04-03-2000, 05:40 PM
Thanks olecc and Henrick. There is much more definition in her face and collar bone in the original. Somehow lost a lot in the digital pic. Also, the highlights are more even on both legs in the original. Thanks for pointing out the problem with the legs.

Deb
04-04-2000, 12:55 AM
Here is a 16x20 painting in oil I took from an ad in a magazine. Eventually I would like to be able to move away from using photos so much or at least use my own. But I really liked the serene look about this one. In any case, I'm learning and have no intention of selling these first ones I'm learning on. In fact, I really haven't looked that far into the future as selling anything. I just want to be able to paint beautiful pictures. I think I may be finished with this one. What do you think?
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/morningwalk.jpg

william
04-04-2000, 09:22 PM
Deb... It seems to me that the lady is to
sharp against the soft background. Looks
glued on the painting.

You are giving the same brushwork and color all over the backgound... and it make poor perception of the distance...so the figure looks "in the air". I can't realize if the left tree is far or entering the fence. The draw sugest it is entering, but the way that you painted it sugests it is far (comparing it with the right one) Both trees have an equal color and light, and that is fighting with the perspective.

My opinion and taste...

[This message has been edited by william (edited April 04, 2000).]

llis
04-05-2000, 12:06 AM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/cool.gif I really like this painting. It does tell a story and that is one thing that keeps me coming back to this painting. It is fun to keep and look back at your first paintings and see how far you have come, but this doesn't look like a first painting. You really did well.

The only thing other thing that I would take a look at is in consideration of where your light source is coming from. The highlight all the way down the rail on the left side of the painting shows light coming from behind the girl's left shoulder. You do show a light shadow on the girls right shoulder and it probably does look darker on your original painting, but maybe making it a little darker would define the light source better. Also, put a darker shadow on her hat on that same side to the front. Hard to write what I feel and I defintely could be wrong because I am just learning myself. You do good work!

henrik
04-05-2000, 06:12 AM
william, good point about the trees - I agree with you.