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J.Dillon
03-26-2000, 11:39 PM
Did this a while ago. How can I improve it ? Thanks.
http://albums.photopoint.com/j/View?u=259042&a=1928336&p=17067145&Sequence=0

henrik
03-27-2000, 02:15 AM
Dillon, I like this the best (of your posts) - the sky is breathtaking! Love it!

My first impression is "don't change a thing".

cagathoc
03-27-2000, 08:21 AM
Georgeous sky!

Is the shape of the boat really like this?

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/mewtwo.JPG


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bruin70
03-27-2000, 09:18 AM
the red looks wrong. it's not strong at the source, and so it doesn't light the clouds. i have to see the photo on this issue. i should expect the reddish light on the clouds to be as light as where the sky turns light towards the horizon.

the spacing(sky) in between the clouds narrows as they go off in the distance. your perspective is wrong on the clouds. or at least, even if they appear as you painted them, you should change their clusters as they go back. the clouds are fuller near you because you see their full bottoms,,,and as they go off in the distance, you see them more as a side view, so their bottoms become flatter and the tops stay full. they also narrow in the distance.
the waves ought to be ,,,,not white.

sail is a bit odd too, but i don't know if it's backlit or simply in shadow.....milt

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/skycloud.jpg



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amanda
03-27-2000, 10:41 AM
Another wonderful piece by you - so dramatic. Love it but agree about the red - maybe its a bit too strong.

Patti
03-27-2000, 01:30 PM
I like this a lot. Another winner in my book. Looking forward to more.
Pat

oleCC
03-27-2000, 10:25 PM
Love it! I agree about the reds..especially making them lighter as Milt says. As for the boat, wonder if you were to just darken the back angle as it would be shadowed as opposed to the sides. Very nice work ! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

bobsart
03-28-2000, 09:23 AM
Ditto to Bruin's comments. You need to throw that sunset and distant cloud grouping farther back. The schooner's sails are "fighting" with the clouds for attention. Since the light source is on the horizon, you will need to tone down the foreground. You might want to darken the schooner a little. I like to make sunsets the focal point of my work with ships or waves just happening to pass through the scene.

bob

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J.Dillon
03-28-2000, 03:59 PM
I appreciate every ones critique. For now I plan to leave this one alone and try to incorperate comments in future attempts at marine art.