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grannyb
02-28-2000, 10:14 PM
Hi From Australia,I just returned from a painting trip to the "Pilbara" ...a remote iron ore rich area of North West Australia that abounds with spirituality and a sense of timelessness.The gorges need to be seen to be believed! I did this watercolor painting of "Radio Hill" IMG http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/Radio Hill Pilbara.gif[/IMG] but feel there may be a need for something else in the foreground ...comments please

llis
02-28-2000, 10:20 PM
Think you trouble with your upload might be with the name of your file. Try to rename your file something like hill.jpg and see if that will work. I know that the system will not take a file name with spaces. Don't know if it will take gif files.

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grannyb
02-28-2000, 10:43 PM
Sorry ...the gif file must have been too large ..I will try again with a JPG and see if that works

grannyb
02-28-2000, 10:52 PM
Try again! Image here this time..I hope !!
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/Radio Hill Pilbara.jpg

Drew Davis
02-28-2000, 10:56 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/Radio Hill Pilbara.jpg


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Bruce Rohrlach
02-28-2000, 10:58 PM
Nearly there GB!!
This time when you upload the file to wet-canvas, make sure there are no spaces in the filename (make it one word).
e.g. RadioHillPilbara.jpg or preferably a shorter name. Then it will work.
Looking forward to seeing your work !
Bruce

Drew Davis
02-28-2000, 11:02 PM
The message board software has a problem with spaces in file names. The IMG /IMG tags in square brackets don't get translated right, and the name stops at the first space. One workaround is to just rename the file before you upload it, so that it has no spaces in the file name. Another is to use HTML instead of the UBB code to display the image, as I did above. The HTML code looks like:

&ltimg src="http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/Radio Hill Pilbara.jpg"&gt

Note the double quotes around the file name, which help the software figure out that the spaces are part of the name.

grannyb
02-28-2000, 11:09 PM
Thank you both for your help ...now ..what do you think?

PatS
02-28-2000, 11:17 PM
I like this a lot. You have really achieved a wonderful sense of the vastness and depth of the canyons. One thing I might have done differently is not having the cloud line up with the top of the mesa. A lovely painting. One you can get lost in.

Drew Davis
02-28-2000, 11:33 PM
The square format enhances the solidity of the subject nicely. And I like the broken effect of the dark structures atop the mesa, which add a nice feeling of distance.

The feeling of depth would be enhanced by cooling the distant mountains a bit. They're lighter, but still very close in color to the middle ground.

The light in the foreground seems to disappear by the time we reach the hill. The main subject is all very close in value and color. More contrast could make it a bit livelier, and also explain the form of the hill and canyons.

Bruce Rohrlach
02-29-2000, 01:59 AM
For anyone else reading this - I think the image shows only in Internet Explorer (not Netscape).

Like your landscape a lot also. You certainly have captured the essence of that dry-arid iron-stained Kimberly country (region). I might have tried to sharpen and define the large blocks of laterite that have eroded down off the mesa a little more so that they are more obviously interpreted as separate blocks that have collapsed down. I like it. Have any others to show ? http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

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cagathoc
02-29-2000, 10:05 AM
I love the color. The composition gives me a feel for the vastness of the place and the colors help me feel it. The warmth of the mountain against the cool sky is very pleasurable. The scrub on top of the mountain is just right - not overly defined; it looks distant.

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bruin70
02-29-2000, 10:07 AM
hey granny,,,,i can't see squat!

am i in the twilight zone,,,or what

grannyb
02-29-2000, 06:39 PM
thank you for your valuable comments folks...do I take it that it needs nothing more in the foreground then?

PS.....the Kimberley region is further north than the Pilbara ..less iron ore there and more tropical in climate.
The Pilbara stretches from the coast mid north of Western Australia to the central arid lands at the edge of the Gibson & Great Sandy deserts,an area rich in Aboriginal legends. A landscape that time forgot!

Phyllis Rennie
02-29-2000, 09:31 PM
I think the foreground is quite interesting even though empty--it adds to the feeling of desolate space. Why don't you consider adding a few highlights to the rocks and ridges of the canyon wall? And maybe some darker shadows, too, to help define it.

shelewis
03-12-2000, 07:43 PM
I must be in the twilight zone with milt, can't see anything here!! but now my curiousity is peaked, so please someone help!!!

Paula

arlene
03-12-2000, 11:55 PM
i can't see squat either.
can you find another way to get onto the site?

Electra
03-13-2000, 10:49 PM
I found the problem...

Netscape users, you should see the picture now.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/Radio_Hill_Pilbara.jpg

oleCC
03-14-2000, 01:19 AM
I can only see the top half (netscape) but what I do see is blurry... is it my puter?
Would really love to see this correctly !


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CarlyHardy
03-14-2000, 03:51 PM
Hope this will work...I changed the size of the pic and gave it a generic title..hilltop.
Nice painting, granny...you captured the massive structure of the cliffs and the gorges in the foreground. I really like the sky! carly
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/hilltop.jpg

grannyb
03-15-2000, 12:05 AM
Thanks for making it possible for veryone to seeit!!
I have taken the advice and highlighted some of the rocks ,but the pic is a bit darker than it is in the 'flesh'.
I did another one of the same area and I find it too looks a bit too dark here and there but thats the way it really is ...I shall have to try and leave some more white paper ...I just jump in and slap the paint on ..then find I don't have enough highlights.
I'm working up to having a 'go' at the cafe project....a new style for me!!

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