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Bruce Rohrlach
03-04-2000, 06:52 AM
This goes back to soon after I started painting in '95 : 100x75 cm acrylic. The scene is of Ramsay Bay on Hinchinbrook Island (Nth Queensland - Aust). The bay, sand-dunes and hills where painted from a photo I took however all of the elements in the foreground were added to the scene. I didn't like the foreground of the real-life scene (scrappy accacia bushes) so I came up with the vine, kingfisher and shrubs. Sometimes I think that the foreground is too much of an X pasted on Y pasted on Z feel ?? Interested in your thoughts on this.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/Hinchinbrook-Is.jpg

RyderArt
03-04-2000, 07:04 AM
Bruce,
I like the feel of this work!!! It reminds of some scenes from NZ...(Sorry!!)
If I were to change anything....I would probably work on the sky a little. Maybe fluffing up the clouds a bit? I know how blue the sky gets in you part of the world....but sometimes it doesn't translate from photo to canvas. Been there done that!!!
And the composition does lead the eye to the center of the picture. I also like th vivid color. If this is old work....I would love to see some more recent stuff!!!!

Cheers Mate!!!

Stephanie

[This message has been edited by RyderArt (edited March 04, 2000).]

dhenton
03-04-2000, 07:56 AM
Great looking picture! The composition looks okay to me, but that's not my strong point. One thing to consider might be a "drop shadow" on the waves to create the illusion that they are above the water plane. Shading on the waves to suggest more roundness might be a way to go to.
Looks like a great place to visit!

bruin70
03-04-2000, 08:54 AM
if you feel that way, it might be because there is a "window" symetry here. that the foreground frames the scene a bit too well. bird looking in, flowers looking in. if you started with the bird on a branch, the symetry may have been too hard to resist, so everything else WAS added on to support it....milt

henrik
03-04-2000, 07:17 PM
Bruce, wonderful painting...
Have you tried it without the red flowers? It may look better having the bird look out at sea; now it sort of looks like the bird is looking at the flowers. Removing them would also reduce the window effect mentioned by milt.

Phyllis Rennie
03-04-2000, 08:29 PM
I think it would help if you added more leaves, plants, flowers--more of a jungle effect. Overlap leaves, add more of the palm branches, extend the red flowering vine up to the top and out of the painting. Sort of like walking through foliage to the beach beyond.

robinsn
03-05-2000, 03:45 AM
I sure like your work, Bruce and this is no exception.

I think the flowers on the right added a bit too much of the symetry you mentioned. Without it, I think it would work better. Two other things bother me a bit. At the point of the water, I get the illusion of the water dipping downhill at that point which of course water can't do. Also, the line where the sand meets the land looks 'off' somehow. Maybe the stark white to black with no shape to it.

Really nice job on the branch and leaves!

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-Randy
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Bruce Rohrlach
03-05-2000, 04:06 AM
Thanks so much all for your thoughts -
I think I agree re- the "loose the red-flowers" on the right. In this case I won't change it because the painting is framed and it would be too difficult to re-work the sky to make it match. Yes Steph I agree the upper 2 clouds could certainly be improved, they look a little too strained and lack the darker tone on the underside. Randy I think my wave and water line in the far distance needed to curve more parallel with the sand-tree line (esp. under the 3 birds in the distance) that would fix the sloping water problem I think. Thanks dhenton - will remember that drop-shadow effect (good tip).
That did happen Milt ! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

irene clark
03-06-2000, 08:51 PM
Yes, Phyllis, that's what I was thinking too. I feel like I've been walking thru a rainforest for quite along time, when suddenly I've reached heaven and there to escort me thru the doorway are gorgeous flowers and beautiful bird.
Bruce, you've done it again man. I absolutely , positively love it. It WOWED me for sure.
I'm inspired,
Irene Clark with a heart for art.
Originally posted by Phyllis Rennie:
I think it would help if you added more leaves, plants, flowers--more of a jungle effect. Overlap leaves, add more of the palm branches, extend the red flowering vine up to the top and out of the painting. Sort of like walking through foliage to the beach beyond.

janet
03-06-2000, 11:35 PM
I love this scene! beautiful colors! I especially
like the effect of the plant leaves.
is the picture glazed?
The clouds could use a bit more fluffing and blending. good work!