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msue
02-29-2000, 12:34 AM
Okay let's see if I did this right yet. This painting is from a b/w photo circa late 1930's or early 1940's. Lucky for me my grandmother was a shutter bug and I inherited her negatives.
This photo is not very good, but you can get a general idea. I projected the b/w photo, but the transfer paper slipped at some point and I had to redraw a lot of the bridge supports. I know I have trouble with values. Something just seems off here. What do you suggest?
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/00000002.jpg


[This message has been edited by msue (edited February 29, 2000).]

[This message has been edited by msue (edited February 29, 2000).]

kayemme
02-29-2000, 02:21 AM
firstly, because i am absolutely anal retentive when it comes to displaying work, i took the liberty of straightening and cropping your piece so that i can look at it.
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/msue.jpg

then, once i had it cropped, i wondered what it might look like a bit lighter and more contrasted.. is this what your original looks like?
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/msue2.jpg

i will post a critique after i get your response http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif



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bruin70
02-29-2000, 08:45 AM
you don't seem to have a value problem. they read well. please don't think i'm being curt, but there's a reason for everything i say here,,,,,,,,,re: your question,,,,answer: do you have to ask?

cagathoc
02-29-2000, 09:09 AM
I notice the red beams first and then the figure. The figure seems to blend into the general color scheme of the pic. The beams are supposed to be receding and they jump out to me because of the red. Maybe the figure could have a red hat?

p.s. I'm an engineer NOT an artist so please take my comments with a grain of salt! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

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"What if imagination and art are not, as many of us might think, the frosting on life, but the fountainhead of human experience?" - Rollo May from The Courage to Create

msue
02-29-2000, 09:42 AM
Kemme, Thanks for editing my post. I couldn't figure out a way to do that from the disk I received from the photo shop. The colors are much truer in edited version.

Bruin, No I didn't really need to ask. Guess I doubt because the judge's comments on another of my paintings were that I needed to learn color and value.

kayemme
03-01-2000, 02:51 AM
i think the values on this piece are stunning.
once again i've taken the liberty to remove all color from your piece to show you the value scale.. looks great to me
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/msue3.JPG

the only thing i notice in the colored version was that the shadow of the red bridge supports was a bit sloppy. the rest of the piece is so crisp and great, that it detracts from the rest, and makes it less unified.

maybe the piece the judge was talking about did have a value problem, but this one (in my opinion) does not.

how do you feel about it?




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km (http://www.artistnation.com/members/lofts/kmarion/)

msue
03-01-2000, 10:16 AM
Thank you, thank you, thank you. It is amazing how a simple thing can bring that light bulb in the brain in focus. I was thinking about this painting this morning before checking the posts. Came to the conclusion that my problem with it is, even tho' this is my grandfather, it isn't the person I knew.