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kayemme
02-21-2000, 12:55 AM
well, hello. this is a preliminary study for a larger piece of the same thing (this one is 1/8 page d'Arches), and I'd like your opinions on what, if anything, should be changed. This one, surprisingly, has better color on the scanned version, at least i think so, or my all-too-critical eye has just mutilated the first one.
so far, i really enjoy it, but before i start on the other, i'd like to just get a reaction.
thanks!
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/0002sacredspace.jpg



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Gisela
02-21-2000, 01:31 AM
Kayemme,
Very nice! The only thing I can see that maybe could be improved are the windows on the left and center. They seem too black, kind of dead in a very lively painting. Well, as lively as buildings could be. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif
Good job,
Gisela

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bruin70
02-21-2000, 02:03 AM
i like the perspective, kay. i'm prone to think that a dynamic format would would be just what you need to drive your point home. when you have an idea, push it to extremes to make the statement........milt

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CarlyHardy
02-21-2000, 02:38 PM
Love the perspective and the zoomed in effect with the buildings..now just give more of a light source and a reason for wanting to peer into those windows. What is it that captured your attention?
chc

Phyllis Rennie
02-21-2000, 08:07 PM
Really like the colors you're using. The red edge on the roof is very lumunious--nice. I agree the windows are too black--deep purple would be my suggestion.

Bruce Rohrlach
02-21-2000, 09:12 PM
Hi Kayemme,

Really nice rich warm colours!

I strongly agree with Carly Clements - need a subject in the windows. I think keeping the windows dark but having really heavy shadowed faces/figure (s) just "barely discernable" in the windows would add a lot of mysterious mood/character.(Just the barest reflection on a few parts of somebody(s) face and shoulder for example re-set in the window (s). Keep the non-uniform non-parallel slightly warped perspectives. It adds to the tension and crowded feeling in this piece !

kayemme
02-21-2000, 10:07 PM
well, thank you all for your help. so far i played with this a bit and decided to use some deep violets in the windows to offset the gold of the house, i used sepia before an i agree that it is too contrasted for the rest of the piece.
i also used only red, blue and yellow for this piece, mixing all my own secondary and teritiaries (minus the sepia, which makes sense as to why it doesn't connect). i think i like this approach very well, and will continue to use it in this "little" series. i'm gonna keep it 1/8 page as will be the rest because i feel that the small format adds a certain preciousness to the pieces.
i think someone asked, but this is a part of the Chinatown San Francisco Public Library from the street entrance. i was just there a couple months back and heading down again next week. i am doing a bunch of work from my chinatown photos i LOVE san francisco!
will post the newest version probably tomorrow or wednesday as i am bleaching my hair and will not be able to paint until then http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif



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oleCC
02-21-2000, 10:10 PM
I really like this Kay....wonderful use of colors - and I agree with the others about
the windows..maybe a bit "flat".....
Was this from a photo?

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robinsn
02-22-2000, 12:16 AM
Cool perspective! I like it! I think the black in the windows is good, but the walls/sills seem awful thin for what appears to be old buildings and the top window on the left doesn't show any depth like the other 2. The top window seems too square and the bottom window's perspective is opposite what it should be (should be thinner at top).

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