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kayemme
01-28-2000, 10:34 PM
I'm not sure how to upload the image, so I'm providing a link,
http://www.artistnation.com/cgi-bin/gallery_browser.cgi?cmd=browse_bigimage&cust_id=5560&exhibit_id=4756&community=lofts&gallery_id=960

Please, be honest. I don't feel that I can grow as an artist unless I am given honest reactions.
I am not going to comment on what I feel is wrong with it: that's your job http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif
Go ahead, and do what you like to it, I'm game.
Gracias, Seņors
~km

Electra
01-29-2000, 12:11 AM
I'm not the most qualified person here to critique, but it may help me learn too! Besides, I have learned a few things along the way! http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/wink.gif

The Buddha is not the first thing that catches my eye -- the subject should always be more apparent than the accessories (the ?garlic?). Maybe try lightening him up a bit, and toning down the lightness and size of the garlic.

I don't know if the garlic is supposed to be nearer or the same distance as the pumpkins, but whatever affect you were going for didn't hit its mark. It looks like they are next to each other, and the garlic very oversized..

Also -- what is that going up the right edge of the picture?

On the positive side, the way you captured the round fatness of his belly is perfect! I think this picture has a lot of potential!

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Life is less about who you are, and more about who you choose to be.

[This message has been edited by Electra (edited January 29, 2000).]

Bruce Rohrlach
01-29-2000, 08:30 AM
Hi Kayemme,

Really like your blue-green-red sweep in the top-left corner, their tone makes these colours run together well in an interesting way. I guess the painting extends a little further to the top and right-hand-side ?? I would prob. extend the painting out a couple inches to the top and right so that the Buddha gets what he deserves and gets in the scene a little more. I would prob. put a little more "green aura ?? " on the RHS also and so frame and conseq. define the curtain-drape a little more. Onions are done really well and the drape is reasonable good considering how hard it would be to get right!

I reckon the painting would balance a little better with a couple inches added to top and right, and if the garlics were made a little smaller so that there is not too much white/contrast in the bottom-right-corner. Nice painting - did you use water-colours ??

llis
01-29-2000, 09:50 AM
Nice colors. I agree with the other comments. Someone once told me to try not to cut any part of the human body off in a photograph or a painting. One thing that has helped me in composition is to do a sketch before I begin my work. It helps me get my painting on the canvas quicker. I know that doesn't sound like it would, but it does because you work out all your problems before you begin your painting. This painting really does have potential. Keep it up.

kayemme
01-29-2000, 11:10 PM
Thank you all for your comments http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif
I agree, that the white of the garlic is too white. I wanted to make sure that I wasn't being overly critical, so I'm glad you pointed that out.

"Someone once told me to try not to cut any part of the human body off in a photograph or a painting."
While it may not be appropriate in this piece, cropping is essential to proper composition, and sometimes, the whole body takes away from the central focus of your piece. I would not heed this advice in general, but only in specific instances, possibly this one. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif
Thank you again!
~km