portrait in pencil

[Jason Conway]

I done this portrait of my brother-in-law last night and wanted to get some feed-back on it. It was done on an 8.5" x 11" sketch pad using an ebony layout pencil.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/mikey1.jpg

[kemshmi]

Hi Jason
you have gotten the shapes of the face and features and proportions nicely..I would suggest using less "line"..and more of a shading technique..use lights (basically the paper) and darks to define the areas..use the actual line to highlight an area not surround it..I was shown a exercise; draw an egg using no line, include shadow of egg..

hope this helps,
kemshmi

[scottb]

Sounds like an excellent idea for a mini-lesson - anyone wana volunteer? http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/biggrin.gif

[kemshmi]

ok Scott..

I'll draw it up and send it in to you via e~mail sometime this evening..I am working on building my web~site in frontpage98 this morning (morning to me http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif )

(Scott check your e~mail http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif )

[This message has been edited by kemshmi (edited January 25, 2000).]

[Julia]

YOu've got a good hand, but read more about values concerning the human face. The portrait lacks the shape. It's really a good stuff for a mini-lesson.