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Patti
01-21-2000, 01:48 PM
This was my first oil color since high school so it was a little hard to get started. Had a lot of fun doing it though...any advice will be appreciated.
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/User/Sean.jpg

Gisela
01-21-2000, 03:07 PM
Great job, Patti.
I love the feeling you've created with this piece. I live on Lake Erie and often go to the marinas to paint, so I reall enjoyed this. Very nice capture of light and shadows in the main subject. Something is bothering me about the pier in the background though. I can't quite put my finger on it. Maybe someone else will see it.
I'm thinking you must be pretty young http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif if you haven't painted since high school, because it doesn't look as though you're out of practice.
Gisela

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bruin70
01-21-2000, 04:48 PM
what might be bothering you , gisela, is that the pier lines up with the land formation way in the background. it therefore looks flat. also, patti, you should give more mass to the distant land. right now it looks like a rope. and i would also either lower the pier or raise it, to break it from the distant land. another thing,,,,the land mass is very even and reaches from end to end. i would break it somewhere.
what you did, patti,,,,,the thinness, the evenness, the "end-to-endness", and lining it up with the pier,,,is to have made the land "geometric", flat, and not given it the warmth of mother nature......

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kemshmi
01-21-2000, 06:27 PM
I thought the "line" behind the pier was a wave?? but either way, it causes the eye to stop flowing at that point.. http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif

irene clark
01-22-2000, 03:01 PM
Hi there Patti,
Well, for what it's worth, I can see nothing wrong, at all, with this truly lovely painting. It gives me a warm fuzzy feeling, because I'm remembering long hot lazy afternoons on the dock up at the cottage. Just drop a line in and dream about what's on that very distant shore,which I always like to see in a water landscape. You've used just the right amount of strokes there,so as not to draw away more than a breath of interest, while taking in the scenario of the little boy all caught up in his catch of the day. Then my eyes slowly travelled over the waters, near and far, and set to dreaming. Simply lovely. You've captured beautiful, relaxing, peaceful and nostalgic feelings and gently stroked and caressed them onto canvas for viewers to be soothed by. The more I look, the better I feel. Thanks for sharing and keep up the truly fine art.
sincerely
Irene Clark with a heart for art.

Patti
01-22-2000, 03:02 PM
Thanks guys, the pier was bothering me as well. I did this from a photograph I took my son last spring and Gisela - guess what!
It was on Lake Erie at Point Abino. I guess I should have thought about straying from the actual photo at the onset. Do you think I should maybe take the strip of land out or maybe just a good part? I didn't want to develope it too much since it is quite far away.

Pat

henrik
01-23-2000, 11:33 AM
Wonderful painting, I really like it.

One thing about the pier I think could be that the sign and poles just above the boys head compete for attention when you are looking at the boy. The signpost (?) straight above the head have a tendency to look like it grows from the boys head.

robinsn
01-23-2000, 11:51 AM
Great job, Patti! It's a wonderful painting.

Regarding the land mass, my vote would be for taking out most, but leaving at least some of it on the left to anchor the scene to the shore. Maybe enlarge the hills slightly.

But whether you change it or not, it's a very nice painting.

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