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irene clark
01-13-2000, 07:20 PM
Hello again! I hope you don't think I'm hogging too much space.
I think this chalk pastel painting is probably of much better quality for viewing.
The scene is of sand dunes on Prince Edward Island Canada. approx 16x24
What do you think of the sand layers??
Do they look realistic?
Thanks kindly for any suggestions.
Irene Clark with a heart for art.
<a href="http://www.finearts.yorku.ca/kclark/hart/">Heart to H-ART - Irene Clark</a>

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kemshmi
01-13-2000, 08:01 PM
the midground area looks realistic, the foreground area has more value contrast in the modeling of the sweeps of sand than the lighting calls for (it looks moe like what one would see in sandstone layers)...But, with the background sky and trees..it looks altogether like a very surreal landscape..I like this piece a lot, and would not make any changes..
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kemshmi

kemshmi
01-14-2000, 04:54 PM
Hi Irene..well..if it is the dunes you are after then you could increase that..a couple of basic formulae..use a 2/3 split of the canvas..i.e. 1/3 sky..and 2/3 dunes..or 2/5 & 3/5 split is called the golden mean..

kemshmi

henrik
01-14-2000, 06:18 PM
Irene, tell me if you want me to stop fooling around with your art...

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I thought the trees got to much attention, my eye went back and forth between the foreground dune, and the trees. I also thought that the pattern made by the trees did not balance/harmonize with the pattern on the dune. So, I removed some of the trees and soften them to push them further away from the viewer. I also added a bit more sky above the trees to avoid the trees leading the eye of canvas.

Sorry about the crude edits made, I hope the points I am trying to make come across though.

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irene clark
01-14-2000, 06:59 PM
Thanks Kemshmi, I'll keep that in mind.
irene

irene clark
01-14-2000, 07:10 PM
Hi Henrik
I don't mind your manipulating my paintings, as long as it's in good taste. After all, a picture is worth a thousand words or so.
I like the way it looks with the tree tops finished and sky showing above them. Personally, I like the dead trees in volume, because it adds to the gloom and because that's exactly how it looks and I have a problem with changing what is. My paintings are mainly recordings of places I never want to forget. Place I love, or people and pets and wildlife, that I need to touch base with everyday. Painting them just keeps them near and dear to my heart.
Thanks alot for your input.
sincerely
Irene clark with a heart for art.

Johannes Instructor
01-14-2000, 10:54 PM
I like it. If you can get some of the ochre from the bottom into the sky and some blue of the sky in the sand, it will harmonize more.

irene clark
01-15-2000, 12:46 AM
[QUOTE]Originally posted by irene clark:
[B]Thankyou Kemshmi,
This is one of my first landscapes. I'm facinated with how sand dunes drift and flow, constantly changing. There's no ryhme or reason to their constant movement. My intrigue lead me to allow their performance to take up quite alot of space in this composition. Should I have perhaps portrayed more sky or midline? I enjoyed painting these dunes in pastel as well as in oils, all that swirling, melting and flowing of lovely earth tones was great fun.
Glad you liked it Kemshmi.
Thanks
Irene

robinsn
01-16-2000, 10:39 AM
I agree with kemshmi - it gives the feeling of a surrealistic landscape which is very appealing. The colors are perfect, and I like the detail of the trees against the sky. If you were shooting for realistic dunes, then the shadows in the foreground would be too harsh, but I like it the way it is. Very nice!

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-Randy

Bruce Rohrlach
01-21-2000, 07:02 AM
Wow - I really like this Irene! The colours are perfect (moonlit night?!), the section thru the dunes is intrigueing and unusual - this new different perspective (cut-away section of the dunes)really makes this piece original http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif Like the vertical and horizontal elements in both the sky and dunes. I wouldn't change it one iota !

Bruce

irene clark
01-21-2000, 02:59 PM
Thanks alot Bruce. The positive feedback on this piece has convinced me to create another similar one. I like to paint things that are not easily accessable to people so its nature can be shared whenever.
Take care,
Irene Clark with a heart for art.
Originally posted by Bruce Rohrlach:
Wow - I really like this Irene! The colours are perfect (moonlit night?!), the section thru the dunes is intrigueing and unusual - this new different perspective (cut-away section of the dunes)really makes this piece original http://www.wetcanvas.com/ubb/smile.gif Like the vertical and horizontal elements in both the sky and dunes. I wouldn't change it one iota !

Bruce