confused splash

[qaziasif]

MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/11-06-2002/13722_in_the_splash.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: confused splash
Year Created: 2002
Medium: Digital
Surface: Computer
Dimension: 640x480 pixels
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I started this painting in photoshop with the intention to have heavy force expression but i m little confused why that force is not comming in this painting.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Why this image has become expression less.

[henrik]

Hm, seascapes is not my thing really. I don't have much to offer. As a suggestion try the landscape forum, I think there are several members there that are into seascapes.

I think the composition is fine, there is a variety of color and line/strokes. Looks very dynamic and quite forceful to me...

[mswaine]

I don't know exactly if I'm on the right track or contributing to "heavy force expression" but an increase in contrast and a bit darker, bluer tint increases the drama a bit. I have made some adjustments to the below example.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/07-Nov-2002/13722_in_the_splash.jpg

Regards,
Mike Swaine

[Helen Zapata]

ooo. I like this a lot. The colors are terrific and I think you're almost there. But I believe the gray within the inside is off. Seems you'd have more of a clear glassiness inside there. You started that with your blues, but then where it turns to gray, it kind of kills it, and you lose the feel of the magical inside of the wave. The gray is just hanging there, flat and fuzzy. With adjustment I think this will be a VERY cool painting! I'd love to see it in oils.

Helen

[henrik]

You may need a bit more shadow inside the "tube" created by the overhang. Also to make the jagged expressive strokes more expressive they can be balanced with smoother looking areas - In the edited version I tried that a bit.
It is also difficult to judge the scale, how high is the wave? I take it you want to keep this abstract (?) but I noticed somehting in the background that looked like a gray sail. I added another a bit closer. Adds to the sense of depth and proportion.

But, again, I don't know much about seascapes...

[Keith Russell]

Greetings:

It would have more force if you gave the wave more depth.

It looks like one end of a wave (almost a two-dimensional spiral) rather than a long, three-dimensional tube of heavy, fast-moving water.

The colours and the shape of the wave are correct, it just (IMO) needs to be extended back into the distance more.

Keith.