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pjartwc
07-04-2010, 08:07 AM
Should really name this: "It didn't turn out the way I envisioned." I took photos of my progress of this painting and really wondered if I should share the results. I am not happy with it, but decided to show it because maybe it will help others to analyze their own paintings. So here goes.

14x20 Arches 140-cold press block. What drew me to this subject was a little boy eating a large strawberry. It reminded me of my sons on our strawberry picking outings. I decided to add two little girls busy picking and filling their baskets.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Jul-2010/116333-000_Clone_of_painting_b.jpg
1. Initial drawing.





http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Jul-2010/116333-003.jpg
2. First Washes. Not a good photo - values way off. I feel I have a good start. I wanted to get the children painted first. If I was pleased with them, the rest would be a piece of cake! Yah, right.





http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Jul-2010/116333-004.jpg
3. Building up. I'm very happy with the children, especially the boy. I've started some straw that is between the strawberry rows. I want to just suggest leaves and straw.




http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Jul-2010/116333-005.jpg
. Here is where everything went wrong. Those of you looking might think that it's still looks pretty good, but it's not what I wanted for a keeper. What I see as problems:
1. The boys pants are too wide. Correctable.
2. I really messed up with the negative painted straw near the girl in the back. This is not correctable without losing the whites. (I do not use a mask or white gauche or acrylic)
3. The two strawberries on the left are way too large. This is correctable, but I will lose the freshness I want.
4. The berry basket in the front. It's way too large for the size of the girls. Again correctable, but I lose the freshness.

As you can see, keeping the freshness of a painting is very important to me. So, this one is not a keeper. I do plan on doing it again.



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http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Jul-2010/116333-Best_Part_of_Picking_11x15_2010.jpg
5. Eating Strawberries 11x15. I did some cropping. I painted the boy's pail, and scrubbed out some of the straw to his left. I'm pleased with this painting.





http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Jul-2010/116333-Large_bowl_with_strawberries_7.5_x11_2010.jpg
6. A large bowl of Berries 7.5 x 11. The left over cropped painting. Here I changed the basked to a bowl - a mistake, but I left it in. I added some more suggested berries to the left. I scrubbed out the negative painting in the straw.


I'm still intrigued with the idea and think it will make a great large painting. So, I'll give it another try. Thanks for looking. Jan

painterbear
07-04-2010, 11:46 AM
Jan,
This is a terrific demo and explanation and analysis of your painting as you progressed through it. I am going to add it to The Learning Demos because sometimes showing why something didn't turn out the way you hoped and then going with the flow is as valuable (maybe even more so) than one that works right from the bat.

I think your painting composition is terrific and the little boy is definitely the star of the show.

I like your cropping it into two paintings. These could easily be framed either together or separately and hung side by side.

:thumbsup: I'm also giving you a + rating for this thread. :D

Sylvia

CharM
07-04-2010, 11:58 AM
Jan, I really enjoyed reading through your progress with this painting... and really appreciate your analysis of what you felt went wrong...

I like this composition and hope that you'll try it again... in the meantime, your crops were a great way to save the painting.

I've also rated your thread.

juneto
07-04-2010, 01:44 PM
In the third progression , I Love the V shape of the whole piece and unfinished look of it . For me it would have been done .
I think it is Delightful and you are Much too hard on yourself .
Eager to see what you had in mind finally ." We cain't always get what we want "!:wink2:
june :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap: :clap:

gardenart
07-04-2010, 10:15 PM
I think this is adorable as a whole and cropped into 2 paintings. So full of light and so soft and loose. Beautiful. I hope you do it again as a whole.
Sue

peteralv
07-05-2010, 01:42 AM
Fantastic WIP Jan, thanks for sharing....:clap::clap:

sharat
07-05-2010, 03:55 AM
Thank you Jan for sharing the WIP........looking forward to how to develop this further!
Sharat

pjartwc
07-05-2010, 10:27 AM
Thank you everyone for your comments. I've started on the second attempt. So far so good, I think this obsession we have with painting always comes down to making out paintings better. I know that I would have been happy with this one a few years ago. I've found that if something about my painting bothers me, I should listen to my feelings. Jan

Srishti
07-05-2010, 12:05 PM
Wow! I LOVE the two cropped paintings! :clap: It was interesting to follow your thoughts on the progression of this! :thumbsiup: I am sure the next full one is goign to be great now that you have all the problems figured out! :clap: Can't wait to see that!

Marie-réunion
07-06-2010, 01:33 AM
:thumbsup:great wip, thanks for sharing