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crazywoman53
07-03-2010, 06:01 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/07-03-2010/137465_First_Snow_.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/07-03-2010/137465_San_Juan_County.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/07-03-2010/137465_Eureka_Winter.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: REWORKS OF 09
Year Created:
Medium: Pastel
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 6 X 9
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I hate to bore you all again with the same images but I have been going through my paintings photographing them to hopefully create a web page. These are all from photos I had taken in CO when I lived there. I did these three last fall before I moved and never really finished them. So I went back and tried to make some of the suggestions made by the group and signed them. Mostly I tried to add more atmosphere to them.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Any last adjustments anyone thinks I should make before the last photograph?

billmahler
07-03-2010, 07:12 PM
Hi CW
The middle one is my favorite of the three.
It has several "ground's" (foreground, background, midground, etc) that add depth to it.
I also like the variety in the direction of the diagonal shapes.
I wouldn't touch that one.
The other two could use a little more punch and interest. Maybe someone can chime in with some ideas.

eyecandy2
07-03-2010, 07:28 PM
I think that the tree lines are too regular and need more variation to give them interest. Don't make them just go up and down but make them very irregular. Those fir trees in the middle painting look like photo copies. I think that ieach tree should be given some personality and be a little different from each other. That red area in the middle painting is a little too nondiscript. I'm not sure of what it is and it pops out too much, even for a forground. It needs more definition and less saturation. Bosicly, they are very nice paintings. I also have one more comment. I think that in order to get the feeling of such vast areas, the canvas should be much larger to draw the viewer into it.

crazywoman53
07-03-2010, 09:09 PM
Thanks Bill and Phil.. for some reason these photos once again are not clear. They looked ok until I loaded them here. Now they look blurry.Arg! I'll see if I can repost them individually to get a better upload.

crazywoman53
07-03-2010, 09:31 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/03-Jul-2010/137465-Eureka_Winter.jpg

crazywoman53
07-03-2010, 09:45 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/03-Jul-2010/137465-First_Snow_.jpg This one still looks a little blurry to me.. but perhaps looks a little better than the first try.

crazywoman53
07-03-2010, 10:20 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/03-Jul-2010/137465-San_Juan_County_1.jpg

Phil the redish things in the front are supposed to be winter willow bushes. They have a strong red brown color especially next to the snow. I do think they are picking up a little too much red that is not there in the original painting. Red and blues always magnify on me for some reason.

Corby
07-03-2010, 10:28 PM
Crazy...before this one measures up to your usual quality it has need of work on composition. Move the mountain over to the right hand golden line and add another clump of trees to the left hand golden line and reroute the road so it has meaning. A few small additional tweaks to smooth it out... A beautiful scene!

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/03-Jul-2010/70790-FirstSnow.jpg

Corby
07-03-2010, 10:48 PM
The San Juan County painting is another beauty, but it has need of depth. You could blend the bottoms of the clouds down into behind the mountain range, then establish some large foreground trees. This breaks up all of the different bars of color you have across the painting and gives it more of a sense of dimension.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/03-Jul-2010/70790-SanJuan.jpg

Corby
07-03-2010, 11:07 PM
This one is totally subjective on my part. It may well need nothing at all. It is very attractive as it is...but I have sort of a Victorian attitude toward an empty space...there's gotta be something I can put in it! Just a suggestion of the need here, not necessarily the item needed!

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/03-Jul-2010/70790-Winter.jpg

To build a web page is grand!

tgsloth
07-04-2010, 09:23 AM
Christine, I remember looking at most of these before and I think that if memory serves, you've achieved your goal of adding depth and atmospheric perspective. Although Corby's comments are full of insight as usual, I'm guessing that you're not up to moving tree groves or adding an elk. Probably wouldn't add a werewolf either. So by way of what I hope might be an actionable suggestion, and especially since you're a pastelist, how about working in some analogous hues to add interest.
Specifically, in #3, you've got blues, greens and ochres all in the mountain line. Beautiful. #1, though, is rather mono-hue in the yellows and #2 is the same with the reds. Look forward to seeing your website.

crazywoman53
07-04-2010, 04:53 PM
Corby.. thank you so much. No matter how many times I try to get the composition right it seems it is off somewhere. In the case of this one "First Snow" I thought I had the mountain on the golden line but aparently it moved as I worked on it and lost track of the placement. The ref photo was very dark and grey so I tried to pull this off the seat of my pants and apparently they need to be changed cause this little one sucks! lol. So I have reworked it yet again. I refuse to let it beat me. I am still not happy with the road.. perhaps the color? Any better???

TG... yes you are right I don't want to change the tree lines. One of the things about the mountains in CO is that the tree line is carved both by the altitude and the avalanche paths and they are very distinct in their patterns. I don't mind changing the photo to make a better painting to a degree but don't want to lose the flavor of what I am trying to capture either. These paintings being small (intentionally) don't leave alot of room for detail in pastel like they would in other mediums. I have also used no pencils on these, just very tiny pieces of pastel. I'm going to give your suggestion of color some thought. Off to the next one now.

cathaden
07-05-2010, 09:18 AM
these paintings definitely depict CO scenes. They are all beautifully done; in the 3rd snow scene, just deepening the shadows & bumping up the highlights in the left of the pic would enhance it to me. Good luck with your website!

MRSBB
07-09-2010, 01:40 AM
Hi Christine. I had to laugh at your remark about the seat of your pants after those last shopper photos you sent. That was funny. I could live with any of these paintings and can't advise on how to fix with pastel.

My favorite is the last one but I like your treatment of the mountains in all of them. The only thing I would like changed in my favorite is the sharp line on the hill on the right of the ditch.

Stay happy and keep painting...........Lenore

crazywoman53
07-10-2010, 08:57 PM
Thanks Cathaden I'm glad you like them.

Lenore.. Good to see you back on again. Hope Bob is doing better. LOL.. on the pants thing.. never thought about it quite like that. I've touched them up to the best of my ability I think. In a year maybe I can go back and see things I can do different but for now they are going back in the file box. Guess I will have to live with them too. :)