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Thumper
09-25-2002, 01:41 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/09-25-2002/3557_self_deco.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Self Portrait
Year Created: 2002
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 9 x 12 in
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I forgot how ahem- challenging- acrylics are. I've started working on a self portrait using the medium and i'm about to scream ;)

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
But anyways- any thoughts or suggestions that would guide me along my path. I'm attempting to do this in the art deco style- with the simplified angles and the idealistic view of women with deep red lips and large eyes. . . but it's just been a battle trying to get skin tones.
Thanks,
Joc

dots
09-25-2002, 02:31 AM
go bigger ! and tell us something about your mood. the eyes show you ,but i want more about you at that time you hit the canvas.

zynnya
09-25-2002, 02:52 AM
looks great to me! - except for the milk moustache near the right corner of her mouth - & maybe the shadow to the left of her nose is a little dark?

jerryW
09-25-2002, 08:20 AM
I like how firmly various colors connect with the edge and how the larger shapes are laid out.
the tones are fine.
those eyes
powerful

arourapope
09-25-2002, 09:21 AM
I agree with Jerry. :D

Wayne Gaudon
09-25-2002, 11:47 AM
Sensual . you have hit your mark .
.. I would lose the yogurt look on the corner of the mouth .. very detracting. Great work.

Gavinart
09-25-2002, 12:03 PM
Beauty!

My two cents would be to lose the little white above the forehead, as well as change the oval format. I think your expression, and attention is wonderful. The edge of the canvas should (for me anyway) act as a part of the whole, right now it is fighting the edges.

The high key of white in the eyes are also a little too high key. If you look at the whitest white in your scene, i think it would be the reflected pure light of the source you are using (in the eye). This will help recede the eyes and make the m pop without them being the focal center.

jerryW
09-25-2002, 01:10 PM
I think the white connection at the top edge is significant, maybe it is too bright but I think it breaks space constructively

Gavinart
09-25-2002, 05:13 PM
agreed....i just feel the value is too high.

hofzinser
09-25-2002, 05:42 PM
Consider eliminating lines as borders and try using tone and color to define edges. I am thinking of the right edge of the nose as an example.

Thumper
09-26-2002, 01:46 AM
Hello again- Thank you everyone for your insightful comments- It took me a second to figure out what the yogurt lip was about- but I caught it and fixed it :) If 'yogurt lip' isn't an art term already it sure should be ;) With the white connection Jerry and Gavinart spoke about- That was the cropped image of what was most worked so that is not even an issue in the final. Thank you again everyone- if you have any more suggestions let em rip.
Jocelyn
Bummer- Looking at it straight on I realize that my forehead/top half of the head is too short. . . I'll have to fix that. My fault for not using an easel-- :)

Rose Queen
09-26-2002, 01:49 AM
I like the final version, but I thought the cropped version had more punch. It's a great portrait, though, either way!



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Gavinart
09-26-2002, 10:48 AM
I like the finish. I do agree that some of the angles could be smoothed down using tone (not line). You have a difinitive , warm style!