PDA

View Full Version : little cousins at Christmas--xpost portraiture


Lisa Fiore
11-14-2009, 09:55 AM
This painting is about 90% finished and I'd really like your c and c's! It is of my daughter and niece and I'd like to give it to my parents. I can't show the reference photo because I worked off of a 10 year old 3x4 photo from the days before I had a digital camera. (this was tough!) Of course a flash was used--are the faces too "flat"?

Some other questions I have--is there anything that looks "off"? The girls were almost 4 in the picture--do they look about that age? Does the simple blue background work?

11x14, nupastels and great americans on UART board

Thanks for all comments!! :)

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/14-Nov-2009/133545-ks_ptg_1.jpg (http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/Uploader/upload_image_save2.php#)

DAK723
11-14-2009, 10:32 AM
Hi LIsa,

This is very nice! Without a reference, and realizing that people's faces aren't symmetrical, the only things that I notice that might be off are shown below. Sorry, I had to crop and blow it up for my critiques to be visible!

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/14-Nov-2009/82335-133545-ksdakrev.jpg

I would check the taller girl's left eye angle. Based on the tilt of the head, I have drawn a dashed guideline below her eyes. You can see that her right eye (on our left) is at the same angle as the guideline but the left eye is not. The smaller girl's mouth seems a bit moved over to our left - or her nose is tilting to our right? - or, of course, it may actually be that way.

These are small things that I noticed only after great scrutiny! This is a nice painting and will make a great gift! I like the background!

Don

sketchZ1ol
11-14-2009, 10:55 AM
hello. very sweet pose, well modeled. the girls certainly do look like young children. What is off? very little: on the taller girl, I like the subtle rosiness of the outline of her face and think that application would give more shape/modeling to the shorter girl's face. On the taller girl again, I'm having a little trouble reading how the right arm and shoulder meet. I assume you'e still working on her right hand. On my monitor, the shorter girl looks to have a light bar across her forehead. The horizontal 'line' of her eyes, base of nose, and mouth look out of parallel. The mouth looks off-center from the vertical of the nose I say all this assuming she is full-face to the viewer/camera. The right eye looks very much narrower than the left, although I realize that eyes are not exact duplicates of each other.Please forgive me if I sound cold, I mean to be accurate. Considering the dimensions of the board, I would find it easy to be 'off' but not for lack of trying; it's simply very close/challenging work. That is to say, I couldn't do it! I'm sure your parents will be very happy with the finished piece.:) E

Lisa Fiore
11-14-2009, 11:06 AM
Don, thank you so much!! I knew there was something off about the eyes and you spotted the problem right away! And the mouth, yes, off center, I need to correct that as well!!

Sketchz1ol--lol, you don't sound the least bit "cold"!! This is exactly the type of honest critique I was hoping for and I really appreciate you taking the time to look it over and offer advice. (and yes, I'm still working on that hand, needless to say I'm not a fan of drawing/painting hands!) Thanks so much--time for me to get back to this! :)

sketchZ1ol
11-14-2009, 01:47 PM
hello. thank you so much. I've been writing observations here and there. With a background in the construction trade, learned it is as much about the eyes as the blueprint (pissed off a few architects on that). DAK's got the tools to illustrate a point, and the image appears to be correct to scale (11w by 14h)... I modeled for a well known portrait artist (concept piece) and he spent two three-hour sessions working on the hands!! all the best,E

Lisa Fiore
11-15-2009, 01:40 PM
I have worked on this further--tried to correct the placement of the left eye on the taller girl, mouth and eyebrows on the shorter girl, worked further on taller girl's right hand which is absolutely giving me fits (! fingers are curled under and I'm having a hard time making them "read" right), tried to adjust the expression of the shorter girl, etc. I think I'm probably done, but knowing me, I'll most likely go back in with something else! I really appreciate all c and c's--thanks for looking!!
:)

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/15-Nov-2009/133545-ksptg3.jpg (http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/Uploader/upload_image_save2.php#)