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tammy
02-13-2001, 03:26 PM
I had this in Tole and it was suggested I bring it here to see what ya'll think.
It's a bush in my yard. Acrylics on hard board. aprxo 18" x 8".

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So, whatcha think?

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[This message has been edited by tammy (edited February 13, 2001).]

LDianeJohnson
02-13-2001, 06:59 PM
Hi Tammy,

You sure packed a great deal into your painting. This is a fairly complex subject. The brush work is very nice. A couple of observations:

- The topmost part of the foliage and the far left tip of the foliage touch or "kiss" the edge of the painting, which tends to visually trap the subject. You can either pull it in or go right off the edge so there is a definite sense of being in, or out.

- Lovely handling of the leaves particularly on the top half of the plant. The bottom left where some branches show (from here) looks like more light is hitting the bottom half on the bark. There are also a couple of highlighted leaves on the right side, indicating the sun (or the light source) was coming from the lower right. But it is not a definite. Just make certain the viewer knows where the light is coming from. You can firm this up with more directional mid-tones and highlights on the lighted side of the plant, as well as on the fencing.

- The upper right of the painting has the brightest highlight (or is this a reflection in the photo?) which tends to draw my eye to that corner instead of inside the painting. Adjusting on this will also help give more definacy to your focal point.

(Or in the next piece, don't mean for you to have to rework this one if it is finished.)

- You also handle the tips of the leaves well; they are convincingly coming toward the viewer.

tammy
02-13-2001, 07:26 PM
Thanks Artistry,
There is alittle more board at the top that shows but not much so it still kisses the top I guess. I didn't have room to scan the whole thing In fact below the leaves is a field of grass also which doesn't show here (didn't fit)

You know, I took the photo reference when the thing was still green and I really don't know where the light source was at the time.

I guess I should just pick a place and paint it accordingly.

This is Acrylic so I think I can still work on it even though its finished.
Thank you for your valuable insight.

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carly
02-14-2001, 02:53 PM
Tammy, other than the comments Diane made, I'd suggest varying the size and direction of the little white flowers. Hiding a bit of a petal beneath a leaf will give you more dimension within the plant.

How did you like painting on the board?
carly


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