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valentine girl
08-09-2009, 06:25 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-09-2009/143385_swimmer.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: the swimmer
Year Created:
Medium: Pastel
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 12x16
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
woman swimming

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
this is my first attempt at portraying water and it's movement. feedback is welcome and anticipated

crazywoman53
08-09-2009, 09:36 PM
I am not a figure or portrait painter so I can't tell you how to fix things but I can tell you what I see that is off. Her shoulder is way too small in comparison to her arm. The hand that is shown fully is not shaped correctly. The finger valley's are too wide and the arm again is not blanced size wise with the other arm. Hope this helps.

Barbie Bud
08-09-2009, 10:14 PM
I think you did a very nice job. The colors are good and you did a great job with the water. I do agree the shoulder looks off and her mouth might be a bit too far to this side. Thanks for sharing

billmahler
08-10-2009, 02:01 AM
Good colors and feeling here. You've captured a mood and that's an important accomplishment.
CW's points are good. You can probably fix the shoulder by adjusting your values.
Check the location of the corner of her mouth vs the corner of her eye.

yarddog
08-10-2009, 01:47 PM
she does indeed look like she's submerged....the watery look is done well....yd

valentine girl
08-12-2009, 10:20 AM
thanks again everyone. love all this creative chit-chat.

T.Wayne
08-12-2009, 11:30 AM
Hockney inspired? I like how the light beaming through the water hits her body. Great job.