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Ms.Understood
08-03-2009, 12:44 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-03-2009/117883_Chris,_Acrylic.JPG


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Untitled
Year Created:
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 11 x 14
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
This is a composite of a photograph of the woman and a couple of references for the background. This is a commission piece that was given to me by the woman's husband. Originally she was standing in her closet.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
I have always struggled with perspective and atmosphere, so I'm looking for any help in creating the illusion of the receding background. I'm not finished with this piece, and any critiques are welcome.

crazywoman53
08-03-2009, 02:10 PM
This is a neat idea and I am sure the husband will be happy with it when you are done. There are a lot of good artists here to help you out. If you follow the rules of background verses foreground you will see that illusion you are looking for. That must be applied to everything in the painting. Your water needs to be lighter in the back ground. But the thing that bothers me most is the way the dark bank line runs right out of her face. I would either raise or lower that to avoid that line. Most of your values are pretty close. It would benefit you to put this in grey scale and see where you need to add darker darks and lighter lights. You will pull this off and have an even nicer painting than what you already have.

La_
08-03-2009, 02:30 PM
yup, thinning, fading and lightening that distant shore line will help me thinks.

also, are her shoulders too wide? seems to me they shouldn't be much (if any) wider than her widest point of hips.

great foreground rocks 'n such, love the tree!

good to see you back and posting stuff = )

la

Ms.Understood
08-03-2009, 04:05 PM
But the thing that bothers me most is the way the dark bank line runs right out of her face.

Yeah, that was bothering me too. Thanks for the comments and helpful ideas, Crazywoman!:wink2:

La-I knew I needed to shave a bit of her shoulder arm area off on our right side, but actually, she's one of these women with really exceptionally narrow hips. (And she's had 2 kids!) Thanks for the welcoming response.:)

I've got this cross posted in Acrylics as well and have posted my most recent update--with an exceptionally bad photo. (I've got the loosely based images I'm using there as well.)http://www.wetcanvas.com/forums/showthread.php?p=8042797&posted=1#post8042797
I'll wait to post progress here until I take a better photo.:rolleyes:

Ms.Understood
08-03-2009, 07:16 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/03-Aug-2009/117883-Chris_3.jpg

Most recent update--thanks for looking!:wave:

tali
08-04-2009, 04:18 AM
The background is looking a lot better--nice work! You have chosen quite a challenge in introducing a new background. Remember that the lighting and the colors in her surrounding will reflect on her skin. Adding touches of those colors into her skin tones will maker her appear as if she really is there.
She does have narrow hips, but not quite as narrow as you depicted. Surely her husband will miss those beautiful curves. I did a quick photoshop "find edges" filter of your ref photo over the painting so you could see the difference.
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Aug-2009/140629-117883-Chris_3.jpg
You can also just barely see her fingertips on the shoulder in the direct sun--by removing them from the painting you've made her shoulders appear wider than they are.

Ms.Understood
08-04-2009, 12:22 PM
Wow, Talya, thank-you.

yarddog
08-04-2009, 04:46 PM
oh my....what an improvement....she's a lot prettier now....
in fact the whole painting is......a very pleasant scene.......yd

Ms.Understood
08-04-2009, 04:59 PM
oh my....what an improvement....she's a lot prettier now....
in fact the whole painting is......a very pleasant scene.......yd
Thanks and Uh-Oh...:lol: I hope I didn't blow it!:rolleyes:

I've been back at it this morning and working on what Talya pointed out. I knew I ran the risk of really blowing it by trying to "fix it". But I went for it.
I still need to work a bit on the shadows in her back, and jeans--as well as the detail I had in the jeans. There are some ghost areas too that need a touch up, where things used to be.

I'm still working, and still in need of eyes to see what I don't. Thanks for the help thus far and positive encouragement.:wave:

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/04-Aug-2009/117883-Chris_4.JPG

tali
08-05-2009, 05:58 AM
She's looking more natural, Jenny. Re-work can be very frightening, but the improvement (if needed) is well worth the risk. You may want to trace the outlines from the photo onto acetate or tracing paper so you can constantly compare over the painting and see where you're at.

Ms.Understood
08-05-2009, 05:24 PM
Thanks, again, Tali--I can't tell you how much I appreciate your suggestion as well as checking back in! =)

Ms.Understood
08-14-2009, 09:29 PM
It took my a while to return to this, but this is the finished product...as of now, at least.


http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/14-Aug-2009/117883-By_the_Water.JPG