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Mr.Young
07-31-2009, 04:45 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/07-31-2009/175669_P7310069.JPG



GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Golden Ho<br>
Year Created:
Medium: Gouache
Surface: Watercolor Paper
Dimension: 9 X 12
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
Although I like working in Gouache much better than transparent watercolor, I still have some problems getting the final results I desire... too much of a control nut I guess.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
This was my first attempt, so would appreciate any and all comments on how to improve the work.

crazywoman53
07-31-2009, 01:26 PM
Big horn sheep are magnificent animals are they not? The back horn nearest the ear looks flat. I think you need to work on that to make it look more like the foreground horn. There is also a negative green shape there that is a different color than any of the green background so it stands out to me. The back edge of the neck/back below the foreground horn is hard and needs to be softened some. As far as the detail goes you could punch up the hair but I think it reads quite well the way it is. Love the way you used all those colors to show white. Keep up the good work!

yarddog
08-01-2009, 02:56 AM
crazywoman said it all for me..........love that horn....
if the other one were detailed out as well...the pattern play might be rather cool.....yd

tgsloth
08-01-2009, 09:30 AM
You really caught the spirit of this critter and received an incisive critique from CW. I'd add that the ochre color to the left of his ear doesn't seem right. Why is it not background green? And then I just feel like the whole head and neck needs more layers with greater light/dark modeling to bring it to life.

tali
08-03-2009, 03:42 AM
This painting has a lot of punch to it. I really like your handling of the "whites" and the composition is engaging.

Mr.Young
08-03-2009, 10:02 AM
Thank you all for your enlightening critiques! I knew there was something about that back horn that wasn't right... just didn't know what.
As you can see from this photo, I have gone back into the piece and done some corrections and additions. Hopefully the finished piece looks as good to you as it does to me... Let me know!
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/03-Aug-2009/175669-P8030036.JPG

What do you think now?

yarddog
08-03-2009, 12:50 PM
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/03-Aug-2009/182771-yesssmileyf.gif That's what I'm typing about.....greatly improved....yd

Mr.Young
08-04-2009, 04:24 AM
Thank you Yarddog! It actually looks better than the photo I painted from... artistic license is the only thing I can think of that makes it better. :wink2:

crazywoman53
08-04-2009, 01:10 PM
Good Job!!! sign it and frame it!!!

Miranda_Asch
08-04-2009, 01:16 PM
Nice work improving this piece!