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Mikey
04-22-2009, 05:29 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/04-22-2009/28043_sophisticated_7.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/22-Apr-2009/28043-sophisticated_7_cua.jpg



GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Sophisticated
Year Created:
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 40 x 30 inches
Allow digital alterations?: No, please :)

MY COMMENTS:
I haven't been able to take a decent photo without reflection off some parts of the canvas, so some of the values aren't right, especially in the background, which is far to light in places. I may straighten out that bit of furniture, but this painting is going anywhere, except on my own wall. There's a fault in the cheap canvas.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Whatever.

thomas w
04-22-2009, 06:51 AM
Excellent job on the dress. I really like the color and composition of this, very sophisticated.

Mikey
04-22-2009, 10:21 AM
Thanks Thomas. I've been able to get a better photo in the afternoon light.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/22-Apr-2009/28043-sophisticated_8.jpg

ArtisanCo
04-22-2009, 10:44 AM
Mikey--I wouldn't worry about the background colors, furniture, etc. I think it works very well indeed. I think the problem you are having in this painting lies in the garment she is wearing. The magenta/pink is way to dominant and renderend in a very flat way. Weather or not that was the actual color, you have to make it work inside a painting and change it if need be. Think of the face as most important and how can you "knock this color down" to subdue it---Add some background color to the pink. Make the edges way softer like you did above the upper right hand side shoulder against the red. I think that if you can subdue the pink the painting will work. Hope this helps. Chad

Mikey
04-22-2009, 12:50 PM
Hi Chad, I've been told my portraits are rather too personal so I wanted to try something different. The pink seems to look well enough with indoors day light but as soon as I took it outdoors for the photo the glaring saturation was too evident as you say. There is a slight ripple in the canvas, so I can't do anything with this one anyway. I nearly made the garments turquoise or blue, now there's a thought.

Bright Eyes
04-22-2009, 01:21 PM
This looks lovely! The magenta is, as I see it, more of a personal choice in color. I don't think it looks bad at all. My only suggestion on it would be to soften then edges or tone down the bottom part of the shirt. There is a lot of nice detail there then it abruptly ends into the black. Her face and the pose she is in are great! This painting is very well named.

hans.kok
04-22-2009, 01:39 PM
Very interesting... I wonder about the color scheme. How would it have been with a cool background? Pity my PS skills are not sufficient to sneak a view at that parallel universe. I like the panting as it is a lot, by the way. I just got thinking about the effect of different color schemes.
Good work!
Hans

Mikey
04-22-2009, 02:48 PM
Thanks Kimberly, it was an interesting thing to do.

Hans, I'm not much a painting withthe computer myself, but this gives an idea of the possibilities.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/22-Apr-2009/28043-sophisticated_8_turquoise.jpg

tgsloth
04-22-2009, 03:22 PM
I'm with artisan: less pink
It could be entirely subjective but with her head turned, it looks to me like her facial features are a bit pinched together.
Why the odd oval highlight on the left wall?
It looks like the reflected red on the left side of her face as we view it is too strong.

yarddog
04-22-2009, 09:00 PM
personally....I like the pink...it shines like silk.....
perhaps a darker cape.....perhaps with a darker background......
when did you notice the flaw in the canvas.....?http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/22-Apr-2009/182771-groooansmileyf.gif

Mikey
04-23-2009, 07:02 PM
tg, I often have problems photographings warm reds. Desaturating the red only never works well either.

yd, I noticed it early on, but reasoned this painting was only for my wall, so it didn't matter too much.

Corby
04-24-2009, 09:32 PM
Mikey...it MIGHT...benefit from a more unified background, one that is closely related throughout in color and saturated in hue only if it is also closely related in warmth and value to the pink. Any other color is going to wage an unsuccessful battle and lose when it comes to that wonderfully vivid cerise color. And the battle will be visually noticeable, (such as the bright blue green). Here is what I had in mind, perhaps it will touch a sensory nerve...or not... At any rate this is a wonderful painting...the lady fits my taste, if not my reality!

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/24-Apr-2009/70790-28043-sophisticated_8.jpg


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allanom
04-24-2009, 10:10 PM
It's a nicely posed figure from the waist up, with some credible painting involved, but the background isn't working at all -- looks just like a hodge podge of elements scotched together. I'd suggest doing something completely different with it.

Mikey
04-24-2009, 10:18 PM
I think you've done pretty well with this Corby. The low res size reduction pr compression seem to have sharpened some edges, but even so I think some volume with dark grey paint in her skirt below the halter neck top would give it some volume and help a lot.

Mikey
04-24-2009, 10:20 PM
Allan, I wasn't entirely sure about the background but just wasn't sure what else to do with it.