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Alyona
08-14-2002, 03:09 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-14-2002/7265_SophiaOr.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-14-2002/7265_DSCF0009.JPG


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Enjoy Coca-Cola or Sophia#2 WIP
Year Created: 2002
Medium: Pencil
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 18X24
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
Hi everybody!
Here is my new baby drawing.
How does it look so far?

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Any suggestions?

drquinn
08-14-2002, 03:46 PM
As I am sure you are well aware, it looks wonderful, keep on posting progress. She looks like she had fun as well.

Alyona
08-14-2002, 05:01 PM
Thanks drquinn for the comment.
I still fighting with her dress Ė doesnít look right for me so far:mad: Ö
What is about likeness?

drquinn
08-14-2002, 05:11 PM
Likeness looks great to me, the photo she is looking to the side, the drawing, into the camera, but aside from that, definately look alike.

Paintonbrush
08-14-2002, 06:22 PM
Wowza! You are very talented girl. nothing wrong all right.

Alyona
08-15-2002, 02:18 PM
Thanks drquinn and Paintonbrush for reply!
Next step:
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/15-Aug-2002/DSCF00021.JPG

Do you have any suggestions (while it is not too late to change or fix something;) ? I would really appreciate it!
Thanks again,
Alyona

drquinn
08-15-2002, 02:26 PM
I have a suggestion, market your stuff for lots of money, it's excellent.

Gilberte
08-15-2002, 04:01 PM
It looks toooooooo good !!!

wendee
08-15-2002, 08:33 PM
the likness is great....this is a wonderful drawing...I agree with drquinn....".market you stuff for lots of money"..EXCELLENT

jocelynsart
08-15-2002, 10:11 PM
Alyona: This is fantastic! Lots of talent in you I see! Very lovely.
Joss

megan
08-16-2002, 01:02 AM
all the above comments plus:D :D

ronaldb
08-16-2002, 02:04 AM
amen :clap:

giniaad
08-16-2002, 05:47 PM
what a cutie...
keep going!

Alyona
08-16-2002, 08:10 PM
Thanks everybody for such attention to my drawing!
I am still working on it, so it is not complete yet(not complete at all:o) .
But any way, here is last update:
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/16-Aug-2002/DSCF00092.JPG

Any suggestions? Please!

Thanks again for such kind words!
Best wishes,
Alyona

giniaad
08-17-2002, 11:33 AM
just make sure you work the entire surface
(don't leave the background blank)

it's a lovely drawing

champagneharley
08-17-2002, 02:01 PM
amazing work!
Looking great so far.
Regards,

Corrie Scott
08-17-2002, 02:29 PM
Charming, and looks like her, yes

xixo
08-17-2002, 08:10 PM
Excellent progress! I too am turning my hand to art after several years of abstinence. I see you have already started to come along in leaps and bounds in a very short time. Remarkable piece! :clap:
One nitpick and it is a personal preference. In the photo, baby is looking at the viewer, in your pic, she's looking slightly to the side/up. I've made a gif of the head so you can see the differences. I understand that it doesn't have to be exactly like the photo, especially since your picture is much more crisp and clear.
Don't forget to let us have a look see, when it's done :)

coke baby gif (http://www.syptec.com/~xixo/pete/images/coke_baby_face.gif)

Alyona
08-20-2002, 03:17 PM
Hi everybody!
I am really tired with this drawing already - so I hope it is finally done! :confused: or not?!.
Any comments and suggestions are welcome!
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/20-Aug-2002/Enjoy_Coca_Cola.JPG
Thanks giniaad!
I thought about putting something on the background, but it doesn't look empty for my now. I don't want make it less contrast. What do you think?
Thanks champagneharley!
I hope you like the final version too :)
Thanks xixo for you attention. I see what you mean....
But I donít want to screw up babyís face now, I guess, next time I'll pay more attention to it.
Thanks for your gif! It does help to see a difference with original.

Best wishes to everybody,
Alyona

mattlart
08-20-2002, 06:23 PM
Absolutely lovely..EVERYTHING is well rendered:) Might i suggest a relatively dark "mottled" backround? Cheers,-Scott

champagneharley
08-20-2002, 07:05 PM
I think your final work is overall, brilliant. I can well imagine you getting tired of it, I know I would!!!!! :)
I have never attempted anything like this, so admire your tenacity as well as obvious skill.
The only things I can see that MIGHT have been done differently are the eyes seem a little cross-eyed (but then, some children do appear that way), and I would have rendered lower portion of the dress softer and much lighter (probably the top, slightly, too). What you've done is a fabulous rendition of folds in fabric, but think a softer approach would be less distracting, and draw the viewer more to the face, as well as providing a 'baby soft' atmosphere.
But to pick your work really is an insult as you are definitely skilled in your craft!!!!
Congratulations. I have enjoyed viewing your work!
Regards,
Jillian

Alyona
08-20-2002, 07:41 PM
Thanks mattlart!
I really don't know about darker background... Do you think it will look better? I had so many cases when I spoiled almost finished piece when I decided make an experiments at the end... I dono... Hm-m-m-m...:confused:

I should think about it longer...
But thanks for reply and attention!


Jillian, thanks for reply.
You know, before this drawing I didn't use the charcoal, only graphite pencils and (Finally!!!) I purchased J.D.Hillberry book. I was really impressed with his technique and immediately decided to try myself. Plus my friend sent me recent pictures of her daughter Sophia. My actually first portrait as a gift for her I made from earlier picture of Sophia and her mother just loved it. So this is sort of trying myself in new medium. That is why something could be softer, rougher, lighter or more or less contrast. I can see already, what I could make different way. But generally I am satisfied and extremely grateful J.D. for his book!

Thanks for reply again and best wishes to everybody!
Alyona

Alyona
08-22-2002, 12:40 AM
Hey-hey-hey!
Sorry, birthday party is over now...
But here is my birthday cake :D or actually leftover of it..:( ):)
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/21-Aug-2002/Cake.JPG
My best wishes to everyone!
Alyona

drquinn
08-22-2002, 06:05 AM
Belated Happy birthday. If you think it may look better with a darker background but dont want to ruin it, photo-copy it and rough it in on the photo-copy.

Wonderful piece and it was fun seeing it come along.

Southern Style
08-22-2002, 08:45 AM
Very talented work! Great job!

champagneharley
08-23-2002, 10:10 AM
*LOL* I haven't done ANY artwork yet that I HAVEN'T thought ... ooh I need to do this ... I shouldn't have done that ... What if I did this ... should I change that, etc ...
In fact it's WHY I didn't do any 'real' art for a great many years ... thinking my work was so 'imperfect'.
You've done a great job here!
Regards,
Jillian

Alyona
08-23-2002, 06:08 PM
Thanks everybody!
My best wishes!
Alyona

giniaad
08-23-2002, 07:46 PM
a belated happy birthday!!!
sorry it took so long to get back...
and perhaps you are still not willing to go on with this piece

I do miss some kind of background
even just a shading of some kind
to polish it off
as a whole piece

you did a supurb job

empty space just leaves me empty...
could be a personal problem... ;)

but if you did decide to do it...
perhaps darker at the top
shaded down to the white
even above her head
or not...

it is very engaging as is...
maybe just crop off some of the top white
so as to not have so much empty space...
just my 2 cents...

Cheers!...well done!

suncatcher
08-24-2002, 11:54 PM
let me just bump this back to front page...:D

giniaad
08-25-2002, 12:16 AM
don't touch it
unless you feel totally confident
about what you are doing

honestly, it stands well as it is...

Cheers!

Alyona
08-25-2002, 03:06 PM
Thanks suncatcher:D !
Hey giniaad, it is good idea to cut the white top a little.
Definitely it will look better. Agree 100%.
Thanks for your attention and comments (love your work too!)

Best wishes,
Alyona