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R. H.
12-17-2008, 08:02 PM
This is a watercolor painting 12x 15 or quarter sheet of arches cold press watercolor paper. I am still working on composition and changing values so as to keep the background less important. Thank you for the C/C.

Rich Holbein.


12-17-2008, 09:02 PM
I love this. The detail work is so good. My only small critique, is maybe the fencing in the background distracts the eye a little.

12-17-2008, 10:06 PM
You have a great painting in progress. It might or might not be taken further, depending of course on your inclination and personal approach to watercolor technique and what is or is not acceptable. The painting lacks interest because as you yourself have pointed out, a difficulty with values. That is I think the whole problem here.

1. The boat hardware and floats (and thus the boats themselves) really 'pop' if the whites are preserved as highlights.

2. The water loses its flatness if some sparkle is introduced in the shadows of the waterline.

3. The three dimensional aspect is emphasized by darkened foreground values as in the dock and then lightening and graying value as you move to the background.

4. By progressively graying the hulls of the boats, each one behind the other, you thrust the two foreground boats at us visually which is extremely desirable.

I am not recommending an alteration...this IS watercolor. There is nothing here that cannot be altered but I am aware that sometimes solutions with watercolor can become new problems. (heheheh, why I work in oil) I hope the workup is useful, sometimes seeing, especially for the artist, is more powerful than words alone.


R. H.
12-17-2008, 10:43 PM
Thank you Corbin! I had hoped you would critique my work, Your ideas are all things I had discussed with my wife as being a issue with this painting and I will incorporate your ideas into the painting I feel you hit the nail on the head. Again thanks for the C/C. PS the graying is something I will have to do with glazes of a transparent color little by little a process I sometimes don't enjoy.

R. H.
12-18-2008, 03:48 PM
Here is the re post with the changes that Corbin mentioned. I hope it is improved. Thank you for viewing.
Rich Holbein.

12-18-2008, 06:09 PM
What Corby said. LOL

I'd even go darker and more neutral in the foreground. It frames the boats and pushes the eye back.