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deevaa
07-31-2002, 05:32 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/07-31-2002/3200_waterlily.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Water Lily
Year Created: 2002
Medium: Watercolor
Surface: Paper
Dimension: 28cm x 36cm
Allow digital alterations?: No, please :)

MY COMMENTS:
ummm... ugh.

I was inspired by TScottDoves' wonderful tulips so decided to give a flower a go.

This is the first flower I've ever painted. I know why.

For some stupid reason I decided to use watercolour for this even though I suck at watercolours and Scott uses acrylic. I guess I thought I needed more of a challange. LOL


MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
This is a complete learning excersise, hit me with anything you think I'll learn from.

That totally out of place petal in the middle was added afterwards when I didn't think that the 'tenticles' stood out enough.......

I might try this image again, but next time I'll use acrylic.

painterbear
07-31-2002, 06:54 AM
Hi Deevaa:
I like this watercolor, but one area you might look at is to soften some of the edges on the petals. They are all outlined individually; a few of them could fade off against one another instead of being separate entitities.

Like the color of the background at the top of the painting.

deevaa
07-31-2002, 08:37 AM
I'm thinking of doing some over work on this with acrylic to see if I can bring it back from the dead. Thankyou for your feedback -- of course you are right, I should have left the edges softer.

Gilberte
07-31-2002, 03:29 PM
Were you afraid of watercolors and holding back ? Just a question ...


Vissi d'arte
Vissi d'amore
(Tosca)

Pam B.
08-01-2002, 05:53 AM
this has a slightly surreal look. I don't know if that's where you were heading but it has definite potential.:D

deevaa
08-01-2002, 08:23 AM
Originally posted by Gilberte
Were you afraid of watercolors and holding back ? Just a question ...


Vissi d'arte
Vissi d'amore
(Tosca)

Well yes, yes I do believe you are right.
:p

Here it is again, after the acrylics got brought out:

jerryW
08-01-2002, 08:37 AM
cropped in closer could be more interesting

TScottDove
08-01-2002, 12:37 PM
I am flattered. Thanks.

I agree with Jerry that a closer cropping would add some interest.

I'm no watercolorist, but I think it does look like you are holding back a bit; as if you haven't used enough paint yet.

I love the red "shadows" on the lower right. I would add some of that intensity to the left where one petal meets another.

deevaa
08-02-2002, 08:48 AM
I'm not sure if I'll leave it as is, or keep 'glazing' it with acrylics.

Thanks so much for the feed back!!

TScottDove, you've suggesting adding more definition to the petals and Painterbear suggested less.... now I'm all confused!! LOL

This was difinatly a learning excerise....

Would you crop even tigher than this?