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Mikey
08-28-2008, 10:37 AM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/08-28-2008/28043_little_flora_6.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Little Flora
Year Created:
Medium: Oil
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 16 x 12 inches
Allow digital alterations?: Yes!

MY COMMENTS:
I'm leaving this for a while. Then I'll come back to make the touch ups. Things like the grey in her body look bad in the photo, but that is one thing for improvement.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
Any comments

Corby
08-28-2008, 12:53 PM
Hi Mikey, you 'snuck' this under my radar! I'm glad I looked in on the thread again. The color in this is wonderful and I like the unusual pose, caught in the midst of a twirl...I am wondering if perhaps a restrained indication of moving hair would increase the sense of movement. Many of us, if not all to some degree have asymmetrical faces as we have here, but if there were a highlight placed on her right nostril it would eliminate that dissimilarity in the nose? Nice work Mikey...I am looking at portraits with a new understanding.

tgsloth
08-28-2008, 03:53 PM
Beautiful portrait, creatively composed.

Being mindful of the "rule" that elements in a painting which don't contribute to the esthetic effect should be dropped, I simplified the background in the attached photoshop and suggest that less could be more in this instance.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/28-Aug-2008/124239-28043_little_flora_6.jpg

Mikey
08-28-2008, 05:07 PM
Hi Corby, I'll do that. Thanks. It was quite funny, well almost. I decided to lift the portrait with some highlights, then wiped them back a bit. Even so the whole picture suddenly changed and I had more things to do.

tg, I think you are right. The colours are actually her wings, but I softened them. All very well but now it is obvious that you would only know that if you saw the ref. So I wonder if that colour could even be confusing to some.

lunchbox
08-28-2008, 05:44 PM
Good suggestions have been made. The headpiece is wonderful, and the ‘sparkle’ on the dress on the lower left adds to the depth.

Bizkit
08-28-2008, 06:46 PM
Beautiful portrait, creatively composed.

Being mindful of the "rule" that elements in a painting which don't contribute to the esthetic effect should be dropped, I simplified the background in the attached photoshop and suggest that less could be more in this instance.

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Community/images/28-Aug-2008/124239-28043_little_flora_6.jpg




What Bob said.............:thumbsup:

Mikey
08-30-2008, 03:36 PM
Thanks for looking Bizkit. I'm not completely happy with it myself. I couldn't get the lighting to my liking.