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tonyjazz
04-09-2008, 09:53 PM
MY IMAGE(S):
http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/04-09-2008/103497_100_4213.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/04-09-2008/103497_Closeup.jpg

http://www.wetcanvas.com/Critiques/upload_spool/04-09-2008/103497_Closeup2.jpg


GENERAL INFORMATION:
Title: Seagull in Storm
Year Created: 2008
Medium: Acrylic
Surface: Canvas
Dimension: 12 x 16
Allow digital alterations?: No, please :)

MY COMMENTS:
This is 5th in a series I 've been working on. Done mostly with knife work. This was done from memory of an event I witnessed with huge waves. <br>2 close up ref pics of this art is enclosed here.

MY QUESTIONS FOR THE GROUP:
I would like very much some structured critiques. First time I've posted here and need some honest insight as how I can better this series I'm working on. I wanted to abstract the background for impact but, not take away from the rest of the painting. Your insights are appreciated................tj

diquattrom
04-09-2008, 10:04 PM
Hi Tony,

I like the muted tones. The only thing I see that may be an obstacle is that the wind seems to be blowing from two different directions. The tree suggests it is coming from the west, and the way the bird is flying and what appears to be rain in the background suggests the wind is blowing from the east.

tonyjazz
04-09-2008, 10:32 PM
Sorry guys: I thought I was posting in the structured critique forum.....fingers got used to posting here!!!!

Michele: Thank you for the observation......and evaluation! Helps......

MRSBB
04-09-2008, 11:15 PM
Hi Tonyjazz. I thought you were trying for structured critique. Oh well, habits are hard to break. I think Michele caught the problem. The only thing I would add is when you fix the palm tree, I would also have that trunk bent a little too, as it seems to be a strong storm. Other that that, I really like it and I can really see where you have advanced in your skills. Keep having fun..........Lenore

thomas w
04-10-2008, 08:24 AM
Everything looks great, except that since the waves are done with such detail my eye would like to see a little more of a suggestion of clouds and sky.
Thomas W

Corby
04-10-2008, 11:36 PM
The palm tree is so nicely painted I would rather see the sky altered. The wind rain lines should slant the other direction to put the storm in accord with the motion of palm and waves...seldom do we look at diagonals like that as upward motion. In this case the wave sort of tries to climb up them. If the diagonals go the other direction then the force is bearing down pushing the wave forweard and up as we have always seen it so.

tonyjazz
04-11-2008, 10:39 PM
Thanx all for the input. As I mentioned I went for an abstracted BG...that day was an unusual event and the skies were clear and cerelean blue with very little cloud cover, very unusual setting. Thanx again......TJ